Kyri:
U just made actual reference to a non fictional organisation I.e OIC that has nothing to do with terrorism

Are u sure about that

Smallville10:

Are u sure about that

You've confirmed my fears with this comment. Although your literary work has an intellectual touch, you've so far sensationalise too much. Imagine having the whole military to a man while non is loyal to the president. Imagine working into the UN and gained their support just like water while non put forth no allegiance to the government of the country.

Imagine sharing money while no one questioned the source of Zeus wealth.

Imagine killing politicians in Nigeria without any public sympathy from international communities.

Imagine dragging OIC into the mud when we know terrorism isn't their mandate.

Lastly, you've subtlety incite the people against the present day Nigeria government which is an act of treason.

You could have done better if you allow your powerful imaginative spirit correct the anomalies in your write up.

Abuklaw:
You've confirmed my fears with this comment. Although your literary work has an intellectual touch, you've so far sensationalise too much. Imagine having the whole military to a man while non is loyal to the president. Imagine working into the UN and gained their support just like water while non put forth no allegiance to the government of the country.

Imagine sharing money while no one questioned the source of Zeus wealth.

Imagine killing politicians in Nigeria without any public sympathy from international communities.

Imagine dragging OIC into the mud when we know terrorism isn't their mandate.

Lastly, you've subtlety incite the people against the present day Nigeria government which is an act of treason.

You could have done better if you allow your powerful imaginative spirit correct the anomalies in your write up.

. You are a Muslim I get it... I was inspired to write and not instructed sir....
Don't take it personal its just fiction... By the grace of God one day I will make it a movie...
Don't criticize my work pls... The story hasn't even ended yet.
Pls don't take it personal cause I never made any abuse on anyone or organization. All u read is fiction...

Abuklaw:
You've confirmed my fears with this comment. Although your literary work has an intellectual touch, you've so far sensationalise too much. Imagine having the whole military to a man while non is loyal to the president. Imagine working into the UN and gained their support just like water while non put forth no allegiance to the government of the country.

Imagine sharing money while no one questioned the source of Zeus wealth.

Imagine killing politicians in Nigeria without any public sympathy from international communities.

Imagine dragging OIC into the mud when we know terrorism isn't their mandate.

Lastly, you've subtlety incite the people against the present day Nigeria government which is an act of treason.

You could have done better if you allow your powerful imaginative spirit correct the anomalies in your write up.

Maybe if u had put ur beef aside you would have read and understood why he visited UN

wow....i started diz story yesterday evening and finished yesterday nyt....I was xo glued to ma screen mehn....diz z xooo breathtaking.... I really really and really wish such revolution happens in Nigeria coz u even used present day examples.....well,sum pple are really hating coz no one questioned the source of Zeus wealth,abeg,Wu questions d source of our criminal leaders wealth biko?and in diz tym of economic hardship, will anyone care xo far dy c their share to TAKE....and if he used the money for sth bad,datz wen I would av worried BT he used t for d betterment of the citizens..... xoooooo real!!more grease to ur pen dear...

Wonderful

An intriguing story indeed.

Guys pls and pls I need you to check this article out and make comments if you can. It will go a long way in helping a brother in need. Thanks

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Smallville10:

Are u sure about that

yea

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Ohine99:
wow....i started diz story yesterday evening and finished yesterday nyt....I was xo glued to ma screen mehn....diz z xooo breathtaking.... I really really and really wish such revolution happens in Nigeria coz u even used present day examples.....well,sum pple are really hating coz no one questioned the source of Zeus wealth,abeg,Wu questions d source of our criminal leaders wealth biko?and in diz tym of economic hardship, will anyone care xo far dy c their share to TAKE....and if he used the money for sth bad,datz wen I would av worried BT he used t for d betterment of the citizens..... xoooooo real!!more grease to ur pen dear...

thank u sister. u understand d the story well

jephthal:
smallville don't reply comment from a jihadist and fanatic like ABUK or what is he called.Abuk this is a fiction and besides nobody invited you here.make you go back and milk your cows jawe,let better people come patronise us.

Thank u.

Na wa o..person go just enter another person thread dey yarn anyhow, if u too know abi over know.. why u no go write your own put all the comma and full stop where dem suppose dey..instead of to pour sand sand inside person garri...abi na u get the inspiration? mtcheew... over sabi everyyyywhere

good work

am really waowed wit dis story,u r really a rare gem,very talented,and ur researches are very good
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keep it up bro

Till tomorrow i still wonder hw a human can be as creative as you are ... More ink to ypur pen boss ... Expecting ur next write-up ...

mehn this might come late but i love ur plot. ur updates and how u kip d character involved but i just think dia group is too perfect next tym let 1 really get hurt or die it give d readrs emotions nice job

Wow, I enjoyed this. Thanks smallville10.

Smallville10:
“Don’t be surprised; Ade here told me about you” he said but Luke was still not getting it and he didn’t show it. The three men who were sitted just stared at him with a straight face

“Why am I here?” Luke asked

“We wanna offer you a job and make you part of the family” the leader said

“What kind of job?”

“A big job” he replied demonstrating with his hand

“What kind of big job”

“A job that’s gonna fetch you millions in one shot”

“Millions? What job is that?”

“Why all the question?”

“Let me know this job am about to take” Luke said and he smiled

“It’s called TAKE”

‘Take? Never heard of such job before” Luke said

“Ha ha ha” he laughs like a villain “It’s a special kind of job for men with big balls” he said with googled eyes

“Do you want the job?” he asked

“Yes I want the job” Luke said

“(Laughs) that’s my boy” he said smiling

“But you have to prove to us that you are worthy to be called a TAKER”

“What do you want me to do?” Luke asked

“I want you to kill somebody” he said; Luke pretended not to be surprised by the word KILL

“Here is a picture” he said and handed Luke a picture he picked from the glass table. Luke smiled on seeing the face in the picture; it was the picture of the guy who almost killed him by raising false alarm on him

“What a coincidence” he thought to himself

“What’s his sin?” Luke asked

“His time on earth is way past it’s expiring date”

“Alright. I’ll do it”

“(Laughs) I love this guy” the leader said

“You will go with two of my men; the leader handed him a gun and he left with the two guys who brought him and Ade followed them

“the guy is good” the leader said sitting down

“Let’s just hope, he doesn’t get killed” one said

“”It ain’t gonna happen” the leader said with pride in Luke…

Actually dis is a nice writeup.. Thumbs up!!!
Bt 2 be a little realistic ur writeup should luk real. Whu is luk?? Wat job was he doing b4 d incident..
Luk jst followed ade like dat with compelling and he jst decided 2 become d taker jst like dat.
Want something more real!!!

jephthal:
smallville don't reply comment from a jihadist and fanatic like ABUK or what is he called.Abuk this is a fiction and besides nobody invited you here.make you go back and milk your cows jawe,let better people come patronise us.

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Fiction or no fiction, it shouldn't be that way. I saw a comment saying this could inspire nigerian youths.... so what are you saying?

Top notch smallville, when u ready to shoot it, l will take part in the acting (Sarah Oscar)!
What ya say!


Well done bro!

Wow. This is is so worth it. I love it. Keep it up

Brotherly,i dey ontop dz story matter.still waitn 4 d next part...Thumbs up Nwannem!

One thing I love about the story is that it's very short but with a powerful message

haddyboyz:



Actually dis is a nice writeup.. Thumbs up!!!
Bt 2 be a little realistic ur writeup should luk real. Whu is luk?? Wat job was he doing b4 d incident..
Luk jst followed ade like dat with compelling and he jst decided 2 become d taker jst like dat.
Want something more real!!!

I also thought of that anyway

Rick9:
I also thought of that anyway

going through the story again you will discover Luke was literate but working in a production company which i stated maybe u didnt notice... One thing to understand here is that the opulence and charisma and good looks of the men kept Luke wanting more... Also luke following ade was because ade helped him out the ceil... U can check their dialoge at the police station

Smallville10:
going through the story again you will discover Luke was literate but working in a production company which i stated maybe u didnt notice... One thing to understand here is that the opulence and charisma and good looks of the men kept Luke wanting more... Also luke following ade was because ade helped him out the ceil... U can check their dialoge at the police station

ok well I really enjoyed the story hope u are promoting it oh.

Smallville10:
.... The story hasn't even ended yet..

u mean say part 2 dey

Rick9:
ok well I really enjoyed the story hope u are promoting it oh.

sure

Masterpiece

Please Tag me along when the part 2 comes out for reading..... Nice creative writing Bro, i envy your skills

Part will not be coming out here as a story but as a movie in the nearest future

Chommieblaq:
Top notch smallville, when u ready to shoot it, l will take part in the acting (Sarah Oscar)!
What ya say!


Well done bro!

u fyn