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Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 5:43pm On Nov 11, 2006

_{Nilla is actually from vanilla} It takes some guts to keep a name that beautiful. You seem it.

Anyways, I've read your poem and you don't seem a first-timer. Trust me you'll be powerful after the next score._{powerful as in-- somegirl no go even see your break-light}

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 5:30pm On Nov 11, 2006

Nilla is that really your first painting? it's breathtaking. . . "Just like vanilla"

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 5:27pm On Nov 11, 2006

My heart went out with the piece. Nilla inspired it. _{like for real. . . no woos}

Thanks-- somegirl & genial.

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 3:15am On Nov 11, 2006

MADRE

Her brow sweaty, clothes ragged, figure gaunt
She looks tired, she is tired.
Hair dread-locked by dirt, feet with dust covered
Closer. She humms a raspy tune
The tune is raspy or might be her voice
But her eyes seem focused, dirty and focused.

By God, I wonder where she comes from,
Maybe I should wonder where she goes.

But those eyes stare like royalty, who is she?
Who could she be? A queen? A warriors widow?

The desert sun scorching. There's only one tree, I sit under.

Alas! She walks toward me. I feel terror-- numbness-- I'm speechless
Knees weak I stand. Our eyes meet. She falls.
She is dirty, she must smell. But she's in my arms smelly or not.
She's out. How long has she but walked? She needs water.

She's under my tree; still in my arms, still beautiful. Still out.
But who is she? I wipe her face. SUCH CONCEALED RADIANCE!

Those eyes open and catch me sobbing and wishing and cursing
and swearing--

I gasp "who are you?"
And from beauty interior she breathes:
"My name is Nigeria" . . .

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 2:58am On Nov 11, 2006

I'm still trying to say the contest is kind'a flawed when the judge is hyper-ventilating. "challenger" is a reply to frank. Here's my piece below.

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 12:49am On Nov 11, 2006

challenger

One tip for my adversary in armor-blue:
I shall swing my sword low
And with stealth I shall blow
And with feigned cries of pain
I shall bid you cocky
And might you think for once you have me
But for your pride, I'll watch you lose.

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 12:40am On Nov 11, 2006

Now I have to fight with some dude over my girl, my own personal Nilla, and that aint funny._{storms off to meet genial}

Omo genius, them pay you? Nna una see me see trouble oo. You're in my teeth, my hair, I can't even breathe. You need'a back off. grin

_{Just kidding. But I guess the guy sharp pass me; I'll go find greener pastures somewhere else. . . it still aint funny}

hmm

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 6:40pm On Nov 10, 2006

Genial boo, welcome to franks thread grin

But hey I'll give you that one. I liked it.

The new challenge for me is writting about mundane topics, and cutting out all the enigma for now.

Frank's really pissed, he's cranked two poems for "champ" already. . . . I'm in for some gore.

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 12:35am On Nov 10, 2006

MIDNIGHT

When roses shed pearl-like tear drops
And the moon instructs the bat it's dart
And the quantized snores of croaking frogs
Keeps the toddler afear the dark;
When cheetahs hide their young in rocks
And wolves howl prayers at the moon
And starving snakes opt chewing dock
That grows around man's ancient tombs:

I'm awake, the world's asleep.

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 6:12pm On Nov 09, 2006

nilla baby. . . he ain't. . . _{at least I don't think he is}

Dont worry. I'm almost done. You shall behold me, we will be one.

Romance › Re: Would You Sincerely Love and Date a Girl who Won't Make Love to You? by macalurs(m): 3:31am On Nov 09, 2006

I wont date a girl that puts restrictions on the relationship. If you one day tell me "I want to tell you something: I wont sleep with you till my marriage night _{whatever the hell that means}. . . " when I aint even asked you for sex, then I know you got serious issues, americans call em "baggages".

Again if you make a guy wait so long for sex, till your wedding night, then you open them legs, make sure your junction dont stink. Cos if it does, the guy aint gonna think his waiting was worth it.

_{Blood on my dick? habba}

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 12:45am On Nov 09, 2006

I.m back. And who's charley P?

Oh pls charley don't start a beef.

I already did it and the after-taste

Sucks. It's like punching wind, time a-waste.

Just help us out, we all be friends

We could contest too, poems never end.

Oh charley P don't start a beef
Just love the thread, or pls leave.

Romance › Re: Would You Sincerely Love and Date a Girl who Won't Make Love to You? by macalurs(m): 3:32am On Nov 08, 2006

Helly:
Sex is not all there is in a relationship, there's more to a relationship than just sex, does it mean that one cannot have a clean relationship without sex? this is what u'll do and even get tired of after marriage so why the rush?, ok for the ladies, what if after messing yourself up with a guy thinking that he's going to marry u then he dumps u later? and for the guys, how would u like to marry someone that has been seen in and out by another man? it's more like a 'second hand' like people would say, wont u appreciate a girl who has kept herself morally chaste inspite of all pressure's just for you? a girl that it's only u that have access to her body?, c'mon guy's it's just wonderful considering the fact that we live in an immoral world where sex is the order of the day, if i'm going to have sex with a man, it MUST be after marriage, i mean i can't give my pride to another man who would'nt cherish it 4ever, i believe that a girl's pure moral stand is what make's her beautiful and unique.
so for the girl's who are on the right track as regards morality i'll advise u to hold on to it strongly, never allow anyone take it away 4rom u no matter the gift's and all that, i'm sure the owner will greatly appreciate and cherish your effort when u find him, and so will the Almighty God. PEACE!!!

Blah blah blah . . . stereotypes. . . .

if i'm going to have sex with a man, it MUST be after marriage, i mean i can't give my pride to another man who would'nt cherish it 4ever, i believe that a girl's pure moral stand is what make's her beautiful and unique.

hehe. . . If all you take pride in is your "virginity" and "morality", then you're cheap.
Then again let me ask you: What makes you think a guy values your virginity to high heavens? Unless you're planning to settle with a man that doesn't love you enough to not remind you of your past mistakes, no guy makes comments on a girl's past he truly loves. If the virgin I marry today turns bitch tommorrow, her virginity aint worth nothing. . . baby believe me.

But let me throw you my favorite curve ball. Not all virgins bleed on the first night. So if I wanted a virgin, and I think the only way to prove she is, is by the blood on the sheet on the first night, what makes you think I'm going to trust you if you don't bleed my bed red? It then again boils down to those words you say. There's no proof for trust. I either choose to believe that the "virgin" I married is telling me the truth, or no.

it's more like a 'second hand' like people would say, wont u appreciate a girl who has kept herself morally chaste inspite of all pressure's just for you?

Just for who? No I was just the highest bidder.

Romance › Re: What Physical Features in Women Turn You Off? by macalurs(m): 3:07am On Nov 08, 2006

Guys always wantta nit pick and they don't look in the mirror themselves. Boy they aught to be glad we arnt that freaking picky.

Yeah right . . . Y'all cute chicks aint picky? I dunno about that undecided

Romance › Re: What Is the Meaning of Love? by macalurs(m): 3:11am On Nov 07, 2006

public opinion.

T some love is scratch me back, I scratch you. . . . If you stop scratchin me, sorry for you. To someother couple, love could be those "little things" like kissing on the cheek before you leave work and after you get back. To someone else, love is unexplainable.

To me? the meaning of love is as complex as pin-pointing the reason for your life (religious stereotypes apart). Love could be anything, with reason.

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 8:00pm On Nov 04, 2006

franc1982:
[center]‘A Tribute to the Champ’

The contest was without a snare,
You write with a lot of flair,
So fluid but my fear,
Good enough to make me swear,
Even as I ask of my Messiah,
To be better than as I were,
As I respire with lots of desire,
In a ghetto were a few read and care,
My contest isn’t failure but fear,
Knowing failure itself is that fear,
Only when it can’t steer,
Like an alcoholic and its beer,
Nilla, Somegurl and others will stare,
Knowing my flair comes with a tear.
Refresh Champ, it’s recess and I’m in repair.[/center]

re: "a tribute to the champ"

Son that was good fight air
"Refresh champ, it's recess and I'm in repair."

Nice nice. Me refresh, you repair?
oh no no son. My knuckles hurt worse,
and I need a new pair of gloves
My eye stings, I'll need some glasses

Oh Jesus! where're those short bald-headed coaches?
I gotta put my boots back on, round 2 approaches.

Poems For Review › Re: The Rudderless Ship by macalurs(m): 5:24pm On Nov 02, 2006

One more thing.

Basic,
The fact that your poems are not commented on by fellow "poets" doesn't mean that the poem isn't good. Nowadays, people approach poetry with notions that every piece has a moral to it. So more or less, people want to be told what they wish to hear; sometimes they reserve good comments for only tear-jerking romance pieces. Sometimes or even most times, only good poets know the value of a good piece. But the flip-side to this coin is that everyone is opinionated; in other words, even poets have their different standards. Some see good-rhyming and rythm as masterpieces, some others love being lost in a poets fantasy world, someone else might love poems with the least words possible, saying the most.

The truth is, as chi said, you be your best judge. Another thing is, the nature of your poems should depend on your audience. Some published poems are written for personal use, sometimes not for a specific audience. If you write for yourself, then you ask yourself: does BASIC like this? If you're writting for me, then you can ask me if I like it; and if you really want to kiss my foot, then you can plan on going out of your way to please me; If you wont, then what I say wont matter much. Not everyone must like your poems.

you choose: I left only 2 cents.

Poems For Review › Re: The Rudderless Ship by macalurs(m): 3:31am On Nov 02, 2006

All good stuff above.

I would have passed on commenting but since there was something else, I'll add.

I've read you works, they're great.

Like is said above, poems should have soul, but not all poems need soul. For instance, if you were to write about a man you shot, I wouldn't think you'd need too much soul to express that. Like Gwatala recomended, try getting poems from old and read em up. Of course some you'll understand, some others you wont. But read them anyways just to see what they wrote about and have an idea how much "soul" and wording you would need for a poem you'd write with similar topic. Poems written in those times (15-1800's) that you read today have been critically acclaimed; funny as it may be, many of those writings aren't the easiest to fully decipher, as they're best known to the author.

Poetry is multi-faced. Not every poem is actual, some are fictitious. write on.

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 3:10am On Nov 02, 2006

Hey champ. . .

hehe funny guy

Yeah I wanted to say something to nilla about that. . . I'm changing my writing pattern, so I might not be poem-ing for a while. so yeah c'mon ladies . . where're y'all when frank needs ya. . . huh?

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 4:27pm On Oct 30, 2006

you could write a positive poem about Nigeria. sometime hopeful or just something nice

Actually anything I'd write about nigeria would be pessimistic. I don't exactly know why. . . but if you've noticed, most of my poems are negative. Contemplations on the negative help me understand the positive better. my mind borders on "worst-case -scenario" mode most of the time. But let's see what I come up with; you never know, something awesome could jump out'a bethlehem.

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 8:33pm On Oct 29, 2006

sorry y'all it took so long. I'm almost running out'a things to write about. I'd love to wander into literature's unfamilliar terrain. Maybe I could uncover another facet of me, ouuu. . . . sounds adventurous. enjoy.

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 6:42pm On Oct 29, 2006

I sit still with Silence as I listen.
I hear the gentle voice of the moon,
As she puts the sun to sleep in the distance;
If the sun yields, it will be dark soon.
And I'll mourn lost love with tears tonight
I'll remember love-days in the moonlight.

She was the reason the world was made,
And t'was her that told the stars to glow;
But for love, we were never ever afraid,
For I was her strength, but she was my soul;
Her beauty was timeless and her eyes daunting,
I sit still in silence, my memories haunting,

With the stale taste of breath without her,
And the remnant of life once lived,
I am love's wrecked ship when sober,
I drown in my tears, my only gift.
Though beyond the viels of reality, still I wish,
To touch those lips and plant a last kiss;

The moon still sings but the sun is asleep,
Our love long-dead but still I weep.

Forum Games › Re: Questions And Answer (game) by macalurs(m): 4:39pm On Oct 27, 2006

yeah pretty much

what's your this year's resolution?

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 4:19pm On Oct 27, 2006

YES!!!!!!

I told you Nilla was an angel from God's right hand; Thanks Nilla.

@Frank

Thanks for the compliments. I wont necessarily consider your last poem a full blown "love" poem . . . .It's more like an "I'll-love-you-better-as-time-flies" poem. . . . If you know what I mean.
I think poems reflect who one is and one's philosophy of life to a good extent. Maybe your personality is a very mellow and nice-tender-hearted nature. In this case, you need not change anything about your poems 'because I feel it inside when I read 'em.

I'm working on philophical writings. Not that I don't like writing love-poems but one has to enter some kind'a love-mood for that, which ain't necessarily healthy grin

; but besides, one either writes about love, or love-making, which isn't very vast. Romantic poems get the most vibes. I wish I could get those vibes for other poems I write.

But thanks y'all. I appreciate the moment we share.

And to somegirl, my favorite critic, you're awesome.

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 11:36pm On Oct 26, 2006

meanwhile on the other hand take it easy with somegirl so you guys don't spoil the flow of the thread.

Aight

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 4:55pm On Oct 26, 2006

MOVIN' ON Oga frank wee you nah?

omo mi nilla nwa, you're godsent. You the fruitee-est fruit of your parent's labor.

I love you pass my mama kitchen. Oya gimme de prize before franko return.

You know say you be my . . . e-know . . . _{make I kuku write you another love-poem make frank miss-out}

Romance › Re: Guys And Their Lies by macalurs(m): 4:45pm On Oct 26, 2006

I'll sign out here kiss

Men are saints, take it or leave it. grin

_{i'm gonna pay for that}

Romance › Re: Guys And Their Lies by macalurs(m): 4:44pm On Oct 26, 2006

I'll sign out here kiss

Men are saints, take it or leave it. grin

_{i'm gonna pay for that}

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 4:20pm On Oct 26, 2006

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Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 2:55pm On Oct 26, 2006

Yo T-boi you got the wrong house number. Try politics room. _{EFCC . . . . jisus kryst!}

Literature/Writing Ads › Re: Poetry Contest by macalurs(m): 2:07am On Oct 26, 2006

Baby-girl you know I wont. . . .

Destiny

Our lips met and time stopped
As the sun watched a mortal kiss a goddess
When eyes are kissed shut, emotions erupt
And souls entwine in their own furnace
I stop as tears from her eyes roll
T'was just us two, and no tomorrow.

The wind is still 'tis evening
Nothing's moved like nothing dares
Even the birds refuse to sing
Like God hath paused His chores and stare
She moans softly as I, kisses trace;
I lick the sweet tears from her face.

My melting heart I cannot help
My tears let go as I taste her breasts
She smells like angels wish to smell.
We'll make love in tears as we UnCloth,
That it be told and re-told in the cosmos as destiny;
She shall wake in my arms and the rest-- History.

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