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Serah oooooo. I beg you don't keep me waiting o. Update fast abeg.

I doubt I can lay a hand on any Dan Brown's book at the moment. Read Da Vinci Code but twas borrowed. Let's read something by Ludlum, Grisham or Sheldon.

1, 5, 8, 13, 14, 15, 18, 20
Hope they are not too many.

Arrrrgggg, gossips, gossips! *wailing with hands on head* What thread have I gotten myself into?

Fellow members, as is necessary with most things human, I think we should have some rules governing this thread.
1. Paramount should be the appropriate usage of English. (tenses, etc.)
2. Abbreviations. (full words with correct spellings should be encouraged).
Op, the above are just suggestions. Others can be added.

Im in. I support that we start with The Brand of Cain by Larry-Sun. Currently reading it. Also Red Mosquito's African Nerd should replace Tamsho's.

Im in. Pls go to the main thread and post this link.

Definitely interested. What's the next step?

OP, have you opened the threads? If yes please post the links

Ok, didnt see the above post by Larry Sun. It explains exactly what I was thinking.
@Larry, that's the problem. We need her permission if we should go ahead. If the op doesnt show within a given time frame, I suggest we do what we must pending when she shows up.

Thanks cuddlemii. Your suggestion simplifies things. To build on that, I think we should divide the three groups into Nigerian, Foreign and others. Others being books from other African Writers e.t.c
Or the groups may be divided according to genres like Larry Sun suggested.

Serah, I must commend you on this story. I like your narrative style. Simple and straight to the point. I'm definitely following but I must point out what nobody in all the comments I've read has pointed out, that is in your use of tenses. I notice that most Nigerian aspiring writers have problems with this issue. Please maintain the narrative with a form of tense you are most comfortable with. You are narrating in the past tense here, but you veer off to present tense, especially when describing or when your character goes into monologue or ask questions. This is not right. e.g

serahsadeiyare: Part Eight

"Good, your breakfast is getting cold," she marched out of the room. Sheila collasped on the bed. (What's with her parents? Why can't she have a car now? Everybody she knows have a car of their own. Why should her case be different?) Money wasn't the problem. But her parents were conscious when it comes to spending it.

In bracket should have been: "What was with her parents? Why couldn't she have a car? Everybody she knew had a car of their own."
e.g 2

serahsadeiyare: Part Seven

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Sheila sat on a cane chair in the balcony chatting with one of her course mates on her blackberry phone. School would soon resume and she had not paid her hostle fees for the new session. (She was still contemplating if she wants to go back to Amina hall or move to one of the hostles outside the school's permises. She has to look for a considerate one in terms of fee.) Her parents were not ready to lavish money on hostles. She remembered when she got an admission into Unilag, they had almost convinced her to go to school from home. Thank God the school gave out accommodations to first year students. Staying in Amina hall had been eventful. She had met different kind of girls from diverse backgrounds.

In bracket should have been: "She was still contemplating if she wanted to go back to Amina hall or move to one of the hostels outside the school's premises, She had to look for a considerate one in terms of fees."
There are many, but two is enough. It doesn't make for an interesting read if you are a seasoned reader or a writer, leaves you speaking the correct tense in your head while reading.
I hope you are not angry. Just my observation. You can toss it if it doesn't mean anything to you. I'm still definitely following your story. Kudos and peace.

OP, do we need to hijack this thread from you? Wake up! Peeps are losing interest.