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syahboy: You can always retake if you don't like your score, however, if you had a very high score on the Quantitative section then don't worry too much just kill the SOP

Retake ke? No jare. E don do. Tnx for d response.

[quote author=Capt. JH Miller]What did you score on your toefl?[/quote]I haven't done toefl yet. Let me also add that am a first class grad. Can I still av access to scholarships wiv 307?

Hello. Just did my GRE today oh. Had 307. Not too glad but I thank God. Abeg is der hope for me? I sent the scores to the ff schools:

Purdue university
California - Davis
Oklahoma state uni
Texas A $ M.

Course of study: Agricultural Economics.

mufex: I am so honored. The script is very okay...Amaka..um...she was too direct and working on my nerves. She deserves a punch on her mouth (lol) but i really liked her dry humor..kinda ironical. But the ending didnt leave me satisfied...i wanted to know more about the big secret.

Lolz...u wan know more about d secret? Olofofo Tnx for d comment. And I'm happy you liked the humor amidst the 'serious' plot. Tnx bro

Hmmmmmmm..... I have edited some parts sha.

Lol.... @ Villageboi. Your comment don long so tey I no sabi wia I fit start from.

Hmm...okay. The dining scene where Mrs Ojo asked Amaka her name: They just began eating naa. Remember they went straight from the sitting room to the dining room. And Amaka only introduced herself to Mr Ojo.

No 2, I wanted to show traces of being 'slutty' and extreme bluntness in Amaka, that was why she was hitting on the young man who welcomed her into his home. ..even tho she wasn't "really invited".

But you got me and completely finished me when you pointed out that some parts of the dialogue not being very realistic in a Nigerian setting which I kinda agree because I wrote with a Tinsel-like/ oyinboish mindset .

And about Mrs Ojo opening up to Amaka...well, I still believe it's possible tho I may not have written it convincingly. She had been looking for who to vent all her worries to and Amaka proved to be available at that moment.

And as per the title...well...I don't mind you suggesting another one. I will look into the corrections you mentioned and apply them. So, check back for the edited version. Tanks for commenting.

Hope I have not written an epistle like you sha?

Bimbo Akintola/Omoni Oboli/Nse Ikpe-Etim. I just can't choose one.

EVIL GENIUS

BY

SHOLAY




FADE IN:
EXT. MAIN ROAD- DAY- ESTABLISHING

Several vehicles are plying a tarred road, with movements being slowed down by a traffic jam. Some boys and girls are hawking their trade to passengers in the vehicles.

INT. RED CAR- DAY-

Mr Ojo, 32, is seated in the driver’s seat, wearing a wine cap on his brown native attire while his wife, Mrs Ojo, 30, is seated beside him in matching native attire with a glamorous headgear to go with it. Her face is blank.

MR OJO
(Cleans his sweaty face with a handkerchief)
There are just too many vehicles plying this road; it’s high time government dualized it.

There is no response from his wife whose face is impassive.

MR OJO
(Pockets his handkerchief)
Dear, what do you think?

His wife hisses silently and looks away with a sad face. He shakes his head gently and concentrates on driving.


EXT. BUNGALOW- DUSK- ESTABLISHING

An unfenced bungalow that is surrounded by beautiful flowers with a red car parked outside.


INT. BEDROOM- DUSK

Mrs Ojo is lying on the bed facing the wall, still wearing her native attire but without the headgear while her husband undresses to his white vest and shorts.

MR OJO
(Continuing)
Dear, don’t tell me you are giving the devil a chance to make you moody?
(beat)
God understands why He has made ours like this and we should just believe in Him for our expected end.
(beat)
At least, we have peace. Some people don’t have that.

He hangs his clothes on the wardrobe and sits on the bed. Mrs Ojo sits properly on the bed, wiping tears off her eyes.

MR OJO
(Anxiously)
Are you crying?

MRS OJO
(In a cracked voice)
Not at all.

MR OJO
Come on. This is not the time for our faith in God to waiver, not after four years. Remember, ‘what would Jesus do?’

His wife beams a thin smile.

MR OJO
That’s my girl.
(Checks his wristwatch)
Aren’t you going to church for choir rehearsal?

MRS OJO
(Cleans her nose)
No. I would rather stay at home.

Mr Ojo shrugs his right shoulder and there is a knock at the door to the sitting room.

MR OJO
Let me get that.

INT. SITTING ROOM- DUSK- CONTINUATION

Mr Ojo walks in, now wearing a black trouser and opens the door to find a fair-complexioned beauty in a skimpy top and tight trouser- Amaka, 26.

MR OJO
(With a thin smile)
Good evening.

AMAKA
(Smiles broadly)
Evening.
(beat)
I just moved into my apartment and decided to say hello to my neighbours.

MR OJO
That’s really nice. You are welcome.

AMAKA
Thanks.

MR OJO
I would have let you in but…

Amaka walks into the sitting room, thereby cutting him short. He sighs and closes the door gently.

AMAKA
(Looks around)
Hmmm...your place is nice.

MR OJO
(Staring at her)
Thank you.

AMAKA
You know…it’s rare to find single men keeping their place this tidy.

MR OJO
Em…

AMAKA
(Stretches out her hand for a handshake)
I’m Amaka.

MR OJO
I’m Ojo...Mr Ojo.

AMAKA
(Sits on a sofa and crosses her legs)
I am also single, by the way.

Mrs Ojo walks into the scene in an evening gown.

AMAKA
(Confused)
Hello…

MRS OJO
(With a thin smile)
Good evening. (To her husband) Dear, she is…?

MR OJO
-Our new neighbour.

MRS OJO
Oh…I see.

Mr and Mrs Ojo sit down on the settee.

MRS OJO
(To Amaka) You are welcome to our street.

AMAKA
Thank you. I never knew he was married.

MRS OJO
Well, now you know.
(Laughs)
You came at the right time because you will have to join us for dinner.

AMAKA
(Smiles broadly)
Lucky me…I am famished already.

Mr and Mrs Ojo stare at each other.

DISSOLVE TO:

INT. DINING ROOM- DUSK- CONTINUATION

The Ojos and Amaka are eating rice and stew on the dining table with their glasses filled with juice.

MRS OJO
So, what do you do for a living?

AMAKA
I have my small-scale business. By the way, how are the kids? I’ve not seen them since I got here.

Mr and Mrs Ojo take furtive glances at each other.

MR OJO
Em…well, we don’t have them yet. We are waiting for God’s time.

AMAKA
God’s time? And how many years is that?

MRS OJO
Four years. But we would be patient for God's time.

AMAKA
(Chuckles)
Did God give you a specific date on your calendar for their arrival or what does that mean?

MRS OJO
(Startled)
Not…not really but…aren’t you a Christian?

AMAKA
(Sips her juice)
Not at all. I believe religion is for the gullible.

MR OJO
Haven’t you heard about Jesus Christ?

AMAKA
Oh…that man. It was his name my parents screamed in a fatal accident some years ago.

MRS OJO
Oh…I’m so sorry.

AMAKA
You don’t need to be sorry for me; I'm over it now. Sadly, your Jesus didn’t save them.

MR OJO
(Clears his throat)
But that’s not it. I believe you know He died on the cross for the salvation of our soul and…

AMAKA
(Interrupts)
And that salvation includes being childless?

Mr and Mrs Ojo look dumbfounded.

MRS OJO
Em…my dear, even children of God have trials. God never promised us an easy journey in life, He only assured us of a safe arrival. But God has done much more in our lives.

MR OJO
Yes. I am a living testimony to His greatness. I’ve not been to the hospital for years now.

AMAKA
Waoh! Then, tell me how you are finding a solution to your condition since you don’t do hospitals.

MRS OJO
Em…
(beat)
Not that we don’t do hospitals but we’ve never had a cause to except for this child issue.

AMAKA
And what did the doctor say?

MRS OJO
He said we are fine. So, we are waiting on God. Abraham and Sarah suffered a similar fate remember, but God proved Himself at last.

AMAKA
Oh…I see. It’s nice to draw inspiration from tales of moonlight.

Mr and Mrs Ojo stare at each other in bewilderment.

AMAKA
(To Mrs Ojo)
Madam, I hope you are pulling as many strings as possible and not that you’re just waiting on God. You know how we women are disadvantaged by nature.

MRS OJO
Em…


MR OJO
We’ve resigned our fate to God.

AMAKA
(To Mrs Ojo)
The husband to my childhood friend said the same thing whereas he already had children outside the matrimonial home…

MRS OJO
I’m sorry…but my husband is a true Christian.

MR OJO
Men can’t be the same.

AMAKA
(To Mrs Ojo)
Okay.

Mrs Ojo becomes vexed but forces a smile.

MR OJO
You really ask too many questions…impolitely and also, a bit forward. Do people tell you that?

AMAKA
(Smiles broadly)
I get that a lot. And…that’s one of my strong points.

Mr and Mrs Ojo stare at each other in disbelief and continue eating.

DISSOLVE TO:


INT. SITTING ROOM’S DOORPOST- NIGHT

Mr Ojo has left for the bedroom. Mrs Ojo opens the door for Amaka and the latter goes out.

AMAKA
It was nice meeting you.

MRS OJO
(Cleans her teary face)
Yes…me too.

AMAKA
(Anxiously)
Are you crying? Oh come here, dear.
(Hugs her)
What’s the problem?

MRS OJO
(Bursts into tears)
I...It’s complicated.

AMAKA
Then share it with me. A problem shared is half-solved.

MRS OJO
(Lowers her voice amidst tears)
It is my secret and i don't intend to share it.

AMAKA
We both know there is nothing new under the sun. Tell me...

MRS OJO
(Sighs)
Test…test results done years ago showed my womb had been badly damaged…by...by previous abortions but…but the doctor and I lied to my husband. We told him everything was okay.

Amaka immediately withdraws her hug.

AMAKA
(Shocked)
Oh…my…God.

MRS OJO
I was just scared of him…you know…impregnating another woman outside if…

AMAKA
(Vexed)
Oh my God. Just when I thought I had seen the evil in my lifetime, now, this is the real deal.

MRS OJO
The Spirit has been convicting me to tell him but the flesh is…is weak.

AMAKA
(Angrily)
Oh…so you’ve been ‘struggling with the flesh’ for four years and you’re yet to say the truth? What kind of person are you?

MRS OJO
Don’t judge me. I just needed someone to share my bottled thoughts with. What do you advise me to do? Should I suggest adoption to him?

AMAKA
You are so wicked.
(beat)
Now that I know, it’s better you go tell that innocent man your sick story so he doesn’t wait on God till eternity or I blow your cover when next I come here!

MRS OJO
Are you out of your mind?

AMAKA
My nickname was ‘leaky mouth’ during my school days. You know what that means…

MRS OJO
(Quickly cleans her face)
I…I will tell him. I will take the bold step and tell him. But please, let this be kept between us.

AMAKA
Just when I thought I should give Jesus a second shot, you just showed me you are even a worse being. I thought the truth would always set one free.

Amaka walks briskly to her apartment.

MRS OJO
(Softly)
It’s….it’s not like that. I shouldn't have told you.

She shuts the door and turns to find her husband seated, reading a newspaper in the dining room.

MRS OJO
(Shocked)
Dear, I thought you were in the bedroom.

MR OJO
Yes. I just got here.
(Notices her red eyes)
I thought I told you to stop crying that God would do it in His time.

MRS OJO
(Sits down gently)
Of course I know. There is nothing impossible for God to do. It’s this new neighbour with a foul mouth that…that insulted me about my childlessness while I saw her off…as if…I’m God that gives children.

MR OJO
She did? After all she said at dinner?

MRS OJO
The girl is clearly an agent of the devil. I don’t want her in this house again.

MR OJO
That’s noted. Her words do not edify at all.

MRS OJO
And, why don’t you consider that job transfer to Abuja since you said the working conditions are better?

MR OJO
What? Do you know the meaning of that- I would be coming home at most twice a month?

MRS OJO
(Beams a thin smile)
Of course not. I will gladly follow you to Abuja. I believe I can easily get a teaching job there.

MR OJO
This woman sha. Why don’t you just tell me you want us to relocate to Abuja?

MRS OJO
(Smiles broadly)
Well, you know I like to pray about issues like this and get my confirmation first.

MR OJO
Let me think about it.

Mrs Ojo smiles and kisses her husband on the right cheek.


FADE OUT






This script was inspired by Mufex's short film script.

chaircover: Since you dont know, then ask your brother what he wants you to call his wife abi?

jp philips: those things you call opportunities are abundant for everylife that is God 's promise to us, if he could fend for grasses in the field much less you made in his image.
the question is; what did you do with yours? or you want to blame people for your own failure?

the Op here is blaming an employer who gave him an opportunity where his govt has failed.
22.5m Nigerians voted this same mess of a govt, yet not ashamed to complain where it has failed, does it make any sense?
what goes around comes around.

Hmmmm.....

jp philips: at 21 a lot of people are graduates or have defined a career path for themselves, the fact that you went to coma doesnt mean the world went to a pause.

What is wrong with this one? Ranting about because he got lucky or fortunate in life? Smh.

bodashee: I started the thread, so i wouldnt want to give my answer as of yet. But i wouldnt really consider Mortal Inheritance as a criteria for pacesetting. The acting was very good tho. And Omotola's chemistry with Fred Amata was to die for

From your post, I can infer that you think Genny is the pacesetter. I do not agree. Omotola held her own even in the days of Liz Benson and Regina .

Your question was amongst the three actresses you listed. If not, then Liz Benson would be my first choice. Omotola is a pacesetter.

VillageBoi: No big deal, just double check what you write as various people do learn from these threads.

Panadol extra ...Oga na master!

jp philips: why dont you start by telling us what you did with the last 10yrs of your life?
do you expect everyone to wake up with you because you confused 9am with 9pm?
I don't think so

What an insensitive post!

Pacesetter: Omotola Jalade. (Did you watch 'Mortal Inheritance?' )

Most consistent trail blazer: Genevieve Nnaji.

Best actress of the three: Funke Akindele. (This may sound surprising since Funke is considered "less iconic" than the two "nollywood superstars" but I have not seen a role this girl can't take. She gives her all on-screen. Only few ppl like Bimbo Akintola, Funlola Aofiyebi, Joke silva, MJ etc are better than her IMO).

VillageBoi: I read it last night when he posted it but was a bit busy at the time.

Okay.

Sexy Fox: Don't mind her, go to twitter and see voting turn around. People are now voting Cleo. Dil dey here dey jonz.

Gawd! Tell me you are joking! When she is close to Melvin...you ppl will say she shud stay away cis he is for Maria and she wud just spoil his game.

She is now massaging Elikem...and that translates to her flirting with him And even if she does, shudnt u ppl be happy she is getting over Melvin?

I laff at voting turn around...as if na twitter dey determine who shud be voted for. We would see who gets the highest no of votes among the girls. But the hatred or fault-finding attitude for the lady here is just nauseating.

Some find it hard to swallow that upon her not winning HOH and not being 'hyperactive', she is a strong contender for the money. I can see paranoia has set in on many here since the game is getting to its end and some wud do anything to make their favourites look good even if it means ruthlessly bringing down those that threaten that goal.

Going into viewing mode. If Dillish makes it to the finals, I would surely be back. You may not have seen the last of me.

VillageBoi: ANY short you ever watch and any short EVER made CAN be considered as 'part' of a bigger story. So to state the obvious... this doesn't really say anything. Stories are infinite... they can carry on forever without ending because the imagination of man will never end for as long as we exist.

Same goes for every feature film. The thing is to know 'when' & 'how' to end the tale.

Pls, read mufex's script. I kinda enjoyed it. Let me hear ur opinion.

Em...so where is the trailer? 'Cos all I see is just an experimentation of a horror movie stunt which is not that bad sha.

THE AMAKA: The same way you think Dillish is the chase,, is the same way many think Beverly is the chase. Deal with it

Dhurrh! !! Don't be pained but we all know the truth. Melvin is a strong contender, Angelo is...Dillish may be but Beverly is just a spoiler, nothing more. Deal with reality!

Thank God oh. All these writers wey dey hide for hia don dey come out small small.

I have read it and I liked the dialogue. Didn't know it was a 'ghanaian script'...lol. But should a script be concerned about camera movement? I thought it's the work of the director.

And the story is not just for kids naa...adults may have one or two things to learn.

The line: 'God listens to little children' touched me. If we Christians can have a heart like a child, we would see more of God's power.

Btw, I would have loved it more if you wrote against the status quo in a society like ours where religion tends to make many lose common sense sometimes and ppl say 'We leave it to God' in cases where swift actions should have been taken.

But I would insist it is luck/coincidence...not God...to answer 'Esther's question' in the script. Why? God doesn't need to prove Himself to anybody. Even when He does, those who won't believe will not. It's either they call it coincidence or magic. Blessed are those that have not seen but believe.

sexytabhi: My dear,this is the spirit,selly did almost the same thing bev did but she nevr lost the support from her people and they dint go about calling her names on social networks but nigeria cannot support her own. Some people even claimed that if beverly is up against dellish,they would vote dillish and nigeria vote will go to dillish like wtf. The most annoying part was when some people started wishing melvin and dillish get intimate and ow lovely it would be on live tv then I asked if you can wish that on dillish then why condemn beverly?. Hypocrites too full naija sincerely. To me beverly is still the best chaser and I won't be surpised if she wins that money.

Ugh? Say what? Anyway, to each his own.

Swiftboy: I can consider this as a plot to a bigger and expanded story,where the man will later learn about the tragedy that affected FUNMI.Thompson to bring her back to sanity and a happy ending.Nice story!

Hmmm....*thinking mode*

Aboki4inside: I dnt knw hu i want 2 win..this bba is fuckd up esp. with our current voters.. To tel u d truth d top 3 my fav r Melvin, Angelo n Cleo.. They r funny at the same time mature, they knw wen its time 2 joke. Unlike d others that brag, fight, act like cartoons n dnt hv a steady character..

From the bolded, it shows you don't have the natural inclination to like ppl like Dillish but pls, respect the choices of some of us that like her.

You are singing a tune of Dillish being preferred to Bev on this thread...like seriously? Bev may be heavily criticised but many ppl here wud surely vote her over Dillish when they are both up; though there are few of us that would rather vote a cartoonish, babyish, pretty face with a good heart and comportment than a foul-mouthed, sexy, PhD-in-smoking country girl.

It's not anybody's duty to vote his or her countrymate here. It doesn't make us less patriotic. The BBA game doesn't affect the capital and recurrent expenditure of Nigeria. So?

You are to vote for your favourite housemates...not your country housemate. And most ppl here know that at this stage, Melvin has a chance to win but Bev doesn't! Bev has done the admirable by escaping being up for eviction since she got into BBAtheChase, and I wish her the best...but just like Angelo , Cleo and Melvin are your picks...Feza , Oneal etc. are some.ppl's picks too. Lolz.

VillageBoi: No way! I have absolutely zero interest in big budgets. Yeah I do watch block busters every now and then but I could totally live my whole life happily with the indie scene.

Hmm...I see. I just sent you a mail.

VillageBoi: Because the OP got too excited when he 'discovered' the list... he didn't figure out that nothing has been adjusted for 'inflation' and further down when adjusted 'Titanic' is the 2nd most expensive @ $286m

U won't kill me oh.

One day, a Villageboi movie wud make the list.

Hmmm....who should we believe- Buroda 2shotz or Sister Beverlie?

I believe Beverly cud av exaggerated some tinz during her rant but I choose to believe her. There must be some truths amidst those tales.

[quote author=alkaline.ak]I appreciate you guys criticism. but i'm kind of confuse about what you mean by I'm showing rather than telling. I think theres a phrase in screenwriting that says ''Show, Dont tell'' I personally think i didn't ''show'' enough in the script. But anywayz i'll like you guys to elaborate more on what you mean so to help improve my writing skills. Thanks guys[/quote]I meant the other way round dat you should do more of showing and less of telling. I believe mufex was saying the same thing too.

The person that taught me dat has commented; read his comment and take some notes if necessary. Seems like he saw what some of us didn't see. I am talking of the boi from a Village

Mariarocks: Don't forget to vote this night before you go to bed for Cleo ICE QUEEN holding it down till day 91!! Peace.

How you dey? I don miss you on this thread oh. keep voting Dillish and win Uhuru tablet.

eleshin: dilish sev dey lie.

We all lie sumtyms