Cutehector:
dnt pick my calls eh... U hav tried

hw did u no z me?

Cutehector:
dnt pick my calls eh... U hav tried

Hmm

Your story can be tagged as a very nice one, the story line is awesome and as well as very captivating, some parts of the story can actually create a tear or two in the eye of the reader, its really nice that your added some picture illustrations and that is a plus for you, I can never forget to speak about the Nigerian humour and sarcasm in the story that was one of the reasons that kept me glued.

Although your story is nice but there are some areas that are actually not worth being mentioned, first of all I must complain about your mechanical accuracy, you type as though you are an amateur when it comes to writing especially when it comes to conversations, your conversations always makes me feel lost, as well I must speak concerning the way you express the feelings of your character, they do not portray the fire that would make the reader place himself in the situation and feel the way the character feels, another thing is lack of suspense: though the story is captivating but their is little or no suspense in a lot of scenes which is really bad, in conclusion I must say this, although you have a nice story but it does mot have what it takes to be made a blockbuster movie.

I give this chapter a 3/5 star rating.

lordseb:
Your story can be tagged as a very nice one, the story line is awesome and as well as very captivating, some parts of the story can actually create a tear or two in the eye of the reader, its really nice that your added some picture illustrations and that is a plus for you, I can never forget to speak about the Nigerian humour and sarcasm in the story that was one of the reasons that kept me glued.

Although your story is nice but there are some areas that are actually not worth being mentioned, first of all I must complain about your mechanical accuracy, you type as though you are an amateur when it comes to writing especially when it comes to conversations, your conversations always makes me feel lost, as well I must speak concerning the way you express the feelings of your character, they do not portray the fire that would make the reader place himself in the situation and feel the way the character feels, another thing is lack of suspense: though the story is captivating but their is little or no suspense in a lot of scenes which is really bad, in conclusion I must say this, although you have a nice story but it does mot have what it takes to be made a blockbuster movie.

I give this chapter a 3/5 star rating.

Thanks a lot.

HelenBee:
Hmm

any problem?

saraphina:
hw did u no z me?

ur pic duuuh

That office romance tho, reading with serious imagination in this hamattan... Chai, I wish I have a sure bae

n finally @Mznelly came back to my story.... thanks Ma'am
missed dz so much, waiting 4 d next update tho

kinglekan:



Mznelly i got ur mention on your diary, am a lil bit surprised tho. U sure sey na me u wan mention? Cos I really doubt that you have heard me speaking.

I have, actually.

You sound like a typical Warri boy

MzNelly:


I have, actually.

You sound like a typical Warri boy

Chisos?

Where u bin hear my voice o?

kinglekan:




Chisos?

Where u bin hear my voice o?

I have it n my phone

MzNelly:




I have it n my phone

Impossicantability

*faints*

kinglekan:




Impossicantability

*faints*

Lol, I'm serious

MzNelly:


Lol, I'm serious

Chaiii *face palm*

U definitely didn't see me also like u said?

kinglekan:




Chaiii *face palm*

U definitely didn't see me also like u said?

No

MzNelly:


No

U had beta do a vn so we can be all squared.

kinglekan:





U had beta do a vn so we can be all squared.

Lol, lead the way first, mister

Besides, you should've heard my voice before now

MzNelly:


Lol, lead the way first, mister

Besides, you should've heard my voice before now

lead which way? ...i am busy running my mouth on ur fone saying only God knows what, which way u wan make i lead again kwa?

I yaf not heard ur voice, so be nice and do a vn.

kinglekan:



lead which way? ...i am busy running my mouth on ur fone saying only God knows what, which way u wan make i lead again kwa?

I yaf not heard ur voice so be nice do a vn.

Lmao..

So you know you've done a million of these VN's all over Nairaland.

Anyways, I'll send it in tomorrow.

MzNelly:


Lmao..

So you know you've done a million of these VN's all over Nairaland.

Anyways, I'll send it in tomorrow.

No take style yab me oooo

Aite, looking forward to hearing ur voice.

MzNelly:


Lmao..

So you know you've done a million of these VN's all over Nairaland.

Anyways, I'll send it in tomorrow.

send my own voice note too

Cutehector:
send my own voice note too

Dem send u? ... and u talk sey u dey church.

kinglekan:




Dem send u?

. I knw say u go quote me. Mission accomplished

9ce story mzNelly.patiently w8tin 4 d next update.

kinglekan:


Dis Mznelly can like to break her promise oooo

I'm sorry

Cc Cutehector

MzNelly:


I'm sorry

Cc Cutehector

hi.. Weh happend

Cutehector:
hi.. Weh happend

I'm greeting you

MzNelly:


I'm greeting you

greetings my sister in christ, how is everythn ?