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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by supizino(m): 2:38am On Jul 22
Oyindawealth:
awwwn my crush...(no let supizino hear oo he's my e-hubby) lol... You're highly welcome!! And concerning d Next story, I can't wait!!
hmm i jez dey observe
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by Oyindawealth(f): 10:09pm On Jul 22
supizino:
hmm i jez dey observe
observe Kinni
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by supizino(m): 10:12pm On Jul 22
Oyindawealth:
observe Kinni
what u said noni nd cn u pls pm ur nmb wish 2 hear ur voice
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by Oyindawealth(f): 10:26pm On Jul 22
supizino:
what u said noni nd cn u pls pm ur nmb wish 2 hear ur voice
hahahaa!! Lol... Are u sure u're ready 2 hear my hoarse voice I'll pm d no right away..
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by Jazmiynne: 1:20am On Jul 30
This is WOW!

It would be great injustice not to get this acted as a movie. I'm not talking about just publishing it o. Biko get some legal backing to protect your Intellectual Property (and please do this quickly before someone steals your story and sells it before u do) and then meet with the movie guys. This NEEDS to be acted out. For me, I'd say Kunle Afolayan is the very mind needed to put this on screen.

This kinda talents make #MadeInNigeria look so good! Well-done! I'm currently following your new story and I trust its going to be another hit.

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by jobaltol: 1:58am On Aug 07
Hmm...when you started..i felt it wasone of those amateur writers...the plot is great..kudos

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by bigbauer(m): 3:12pm On Aug 07
souloho19 I have just one word: Amazing. Yes your story is amazingly splendid. Wow, Nollywood has no excuse for the thrash they spew as movies when script writers like you are churning out great stories. Thumps up. You did a great job on Last Gang standing. You didn't disappoint here too. Repogirl, Oyiniceprince, smartestpopqueen, therock55 y'all need to see this.

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by costal(m): 11:50pm On Aug 07
Nice story sir.

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by imranMotunrayo(f): 10:10pm On Aug 14
Kudos to u,this is the best story I've read this year,weldone sir

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by ADECULATE(f): 2:49pm On Aug 22
Bestest story ever, action packed nd a great thriller. Awon eleyi nko iwe ehnnn. Lol. Pls mention me wen u start anoda blockbuster.

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by souloho19(m): 4:32pm On Aug 22
jobaltol:
Hmm...when you started..i felt it wasone of those amateur writers...the plot is great..kudos
costal:
Nice story sir.

imranMotunrayo:
Kudos to u,this is the best story I've read this year,weldone sir
ADECULATE:
Bestest story ever, action packed nd a great thriller. Awon eleyi nko iwe ehnnn. Lol. Pls mention me wen u start anoda blockbuster.

Thank you all for your comments..another is currently ongoing: http://www.nairaland.com/3946214/devil-wears-okrika
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by officialflex(f): 8:37am On Aug 23
hmmm uncle souloho , u av to make this into a movie, as in international standard like seriously ,it the bomb, it sooooo nice pls try and make so legal moves bfor some one copy this story. infact i cant imagine it as a film. it soooo fascinating
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by Domgreat0212(m): 11:49am On Aug 23
Lemme come and see how the devil will be in okirika.kikikik grin

Re: Delayed Diagnosis by FreshestManny(m): 6:34pm On Aug 24
Bravo Souloho19 This story captivated me since this morning I started reading it and I had to put a lot of things on hold just to complete it. I felt present every step of the way. I admire your descriptive prowess. I just wish I had contacts of producers in Hollywood I coulda put you through because only Hollywood can reenact the scenes perfectly. You are really talented.
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by Amhappy(f): 5:22pm On Aug 25
I couldn't believe this story was written by one of our own. Soul where have you been all this while? You are a real talent. I started reading after I saw the nomination and I was never disappointed I must confess. Just like someone earlier commented,I think you should give Olivia more time to mourn her cheating husband. She can fall in love but engagement and marriage will be at least one year later. This is Africa lol .
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by lukfame(m): 11:47am On Aug 26
God Bless you sir.. thanks for writing this wonderful masterpiece.. you are indeed a great talent. More ink to your pen sir..
Have a blessed weekend sir
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by swankmee(f): 11:52am On Aug 26
souloho19:
I entered the office for the second time and found Ada standing beside her mother..they were staring excitedly at the laptop screen which the mother was operating. When I stepped in Benita looked up and smiled in a genuine way she hadn't before. I glanced at the daughter and caught her studying me intently..I looked held out my hand to her.."its really nice to finally meet such a promising talent..I don't know if your mom has filled you in but-"
She interrupted me while shaking my hand vigorously "yes yes..I'm so happy..we were just browsing on your magazine and it is really nice..and very classy"
I had been admiring her yards of fresh legs with one eye and her cleavage which threatened to jump out of her little dress with the other..what she said stopped my roving eyes i looked at her face and noticed she had on blue contacts and a tongue ring as well "okaay...our website..." Website?? I nodded going with the flow.."im glad you liked it"
"Oh mum he is soo cute!!...im soo happy..a magazine just for me!!..come let me show you around..i have a lot of designs on display"
She was already pulling my hand towards the door. I looked at her mother.."you wanted to see the mag-"
"Don't worry about that for now go and look around.. You are our guest now..I'd just busy myself with the website...voltage trends.." She smiled at her screen " what an electrifying name!"
I didn't know what kind of magic strange eyes had performed but I was glad and my respect for him had gone up another notch.
Ada was a chatter box..it took a matter of minutes and she was flirting with me..I actually enjoyed her company and freed myself a little bit. By the time we had finished touring the entire two story boutique I had learnt that she was 19(which I already knew), was single and 'not really searching but maybe just for fun',loved dogs and had 3 back at home.
I almost forgot about the chief entirely until I asked her.."so what's your plan for the immediate future?"
We had been heading towards the escalator she had turned to me "I just want to do what I love..I love fashion design..I don't see why I have to go to school..its my father that is pushing me..seriously. We struck a deal that he'd give me a year to practice what I love..that's why its like you're a God send"
For a minute I felt guilty..for all her appealing outlook and slutty vibes..there was an innocence about her..
"I think parents should listen more to their children..especially about the future of the child"
Her eyes widened "right?..that's how I feel..you're so easy to talk to Rex".(yup first name basis so fast).
She spun around suddenly.."let's go to lunch..you need to tell me about you and besides I haven't eaten anything"
The heavy beans since morning was still guaged in my stomach "I'd love that..but your mother would be expecting me back I'm sure"
"Are you always this polite?" She asked with a smile "that's not a problem" she took out her phone dialed a number "mum Rex and I are going to lunch..we'll be back a little later" a pause "OK..yes im with my keys..alryt"
She looked at me and smiled sweetly that I almost forgot about Fome' "case solved..now let's go I'm starving and I guess you are too"
Babe you want to suffer your toilet ooo....But I nodded in agreement and smiled as she hooked her arm in mine and we headed to the exit. This time I gave Bisi the finger and her face got red in anger

I was about to lead her to my car..and was thinking of how I would pump the clutch so as not to fall my hand when she pressed the remote on the car keys she held..a shiny black two door Mercedes convertible blinked in response.."wow" I admired the car "sweet ride" I ran my fingers lovingly along the body as she was opened the drivers door. She looked at me over the car "this is my baby..I call him Bruce..I just love batman soon much..I only let dear people to me drive him..." She paused then "maybe you might drive him back" she laughed a care free laugh and got in. I looked at the clouds before entering and wondered how a tortoise like Chief could birth someone so simple and uncalculating and free.
She backed into the road and I was observing her driving skills when my phone rang I checked the I.d and almost sighed out loud when I saw strange eyes name. I was about to put it on silent but then I felt her glance questioningly in my direction. I swore in my mind as I picked the call. "Hello"
"Say mum good afternoon"
"Ehn?"
"I'm following you,now say mum good afternoon"
"Mum..good afternoon"
"Good" I could hear the laughter in his voice and wondered how he was following us..probably in one of the many cars behind us "now..everything is working according to plan..so far so good"
"Yes mom I know"
"But we need something to push you into the house..you need to be welcome by the entire family..they need to be free with you"
"I thought of that mom..but I won't be free to visit you" I glanced at Ada..she was focusing on the road but smiling softly
"Now pay attention...a gala seller would approach you..when you get down from the car..are you following?"
"Yes mom..how about next Saturday?"
"Good.fool" he laughed softly "now he would grab her purse and everything handy..but that's your chance to be the hero..you would take him down and give him a beating...and save the day."
"That would be perfect mom"
"Not soo fast..in the process you would break something...in order to have sympathy on your side?"
"What? I'm not sure that would work mom..maybe another time"
"Remember a gala seller..he is a trained agent so just remember that..he won't hurt you to much..now bye my son" I could hear him laughing as the line went dead..
"No wait! Mom! Mom!...." I put down the phone and scratched my head..what kind of problem was this..break something? Strange eyes thought this was play station abi what??
"Hope you are okay" Ada said glancing at me
"Yes I'm fine." Had to think of something fast....."my mom just booked a family dinner with my elder brother and we don't see eye to eye"
"Eeyah..thank God my own elder bro's are really close with me..we hardly fight..but when we do..its deadly.."
I said nothing just staring at the open road watching for any gala hawker
"Cheer up now" she placed a hand on mine.."we'd be there soon..in about ten minutes tops..I bet some good food will put you in a better mood"
I nodded gloomly...ten minutes? Chai...



Soul, dis particular episode got me cracking my ribs.... Seriously I wish I could write as well as u do... Kip it up sir

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by tlordz(m): 9:44pm On Aug 26
This is a superb story... Its bn long I read a thrilling story like dis.. Thanks for dis one boss....

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by arrestdarrester: 10:57pm On Aug 26
I lost touch with you on Nairaland after the ban on your literature citing site rules. I didn't know how to follow up on you thereafter.

I stumbled on this again after so long and in a few hours I have downed DELAYED DIAGNOSIS with gusto.

Suspense and detail not lacking through out.

You sure write good...yeah, you do!

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by souloho19(m): 12:49am On Aug 27
tlordz:
This is a superb story...
Its bn long I read a thrilling story like dis..
Thanks for dis one boss....

You welcome bro..thanks for reading
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by souloho19(m): 12:50am On Aug 27
arrestdarrester:
I lost touch with you on Nairaland after the ban on your literature citing site rules. I didn't know how to follow up on you thereafter.

I stumbled on this again after so long and in a few hours I have downed DELAYED DIAGNOSIS with gusto.

Suspense and detail not lacking through out.

You sure write good...yeah, you do!

Its been long thanks boss I wondered about your absence nice to have you back
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by souloho19(m): 12:52am On Aug 27
swankmee:




Soul, dis particular episode got me cracking my ribs.... Seriously I wish I could write as well as u do... Kip it up sir

Lol..I'm really missing the characters from this story..thanks for the complement..I'm planning on reading one of your stories myself I'm sure it'd he dope. And thanks for the nomination too..Jah bless
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by swankmee(f): 12:35pm On Aug 27
souloho19:


Lol..I'm really missing the characters from this story..thanks for the complement..I'm planning on reading one of your stories myself I'm sure it'd he dope. And thanks for the nomination too..Jah bless


God bless u too bro.... U deserve it

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by Observer3(m): 8:06am On Sep 03
mhen bro ur d bomb ...seriously where did dis grt piece come from.... God bless u bro
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by sussybae(f): 9:53pm On Sep 04
souloho19:

Thanks boss..I'm honored
I love this story You need to publish it and make money more ink to your pen bros

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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by Destiny4fame(m): 2:30pm On Sep 06
Thumbs up bro, God bless you. More ink to to ur pen
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by SPDAZZY(f): 10:54am On Sep 07
Oh my, this is a great piece. I felt like tapping the like button a million times.

This is wow. Well done soul
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by IRALIFE(f): 10:54am On Sep 07
This is da bomb. Great story you have here. I was so caught up with it that I postponed some duties. You will pay ...lol. I like investigative and action stories.
I think this should be made a book. But before then, go through and make corrections appropriately. I also think some parts are not clear enough. For e.g. it was not clear how Fome and Mona's mother was affected by the Widow's initiative and how they intended to expose it. Also, the widows accepted by the initiative where those with few or no relatives and whose relatives could not be of much assistance if I'm correct. How then can one of the widow's father pledge millions of naira to apprehend Mr. Kehinde?Where was he when she was suffering? I'll outline more as I remember.

I'm expecting a sequel on how they run their private investigative outfit and catchup with Mr. Kehinde.
I volunteer to proof read when you are ready to publish but I'll appreciate being notified on time.
Thumbs up souloho19.
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by sistaj: 5:32pm On Sep 07
A great piece indeed.What a wow
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by itsandi(m): 5:33pm On Sep 07
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Re: Delayed Diagnosis by jasmine2013(f): 11:26pm On Sep 11
I'm speechless! You are one hell of a writer... you've got suspense, intrigue, action, humour and characters that are so sweet, one would think they are real ... not forgetting the bad and ugly. In short, you are good! Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece with us. Please, do not let it end here... you should make money out of this.
Re: Delayed Diagnosis by BlissfulJeff(m): 5:21pm On Sep 12
wow,wat a story,weldone bro

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