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darkenedrebel:
SOLIDARITY WITH ADVERSARY

This meek peasant's reminiscing - let him dish it an instant,
Love never dwelled inside this district,
Malignant thoughts caressed our instincts,
Acerbic words on all our kissers - we cursed and curses caused some lesions,
we made awful decisions, and we wasn't really patient,
we were vitriolic, and our baneful words brought abrasions,
lacerations, deriding and account deactivations,
even perused Thesauruses - to grammatically diss our opposition,
I hope this piece can preach the peace - and help in bridging up the distance,
for instance....shut your eyes.....picture me and Nubian Kissing,
Amidst smogs of Egyptian incense,
or me and Tashaa swishing,
me and Truck in deep allegiance,
Lala thinks I'm still indecent,
I regret and I'm sorry - no facade, no faux, no pretence,
Friends uniting with foes - Moors residing with Christians,
am I a wishful wisher - are these verbs of feeble nuisance?
2015 says Aloha - in 2016 we'll make the difference,


Dedicated to Nubian113, cherryice, Tashaamania and all ma frienemies ...

also to luxanne and creamish and cherlene.. and laveda and Kimburlye too..sinizia, mhizkel and estherfabian

Is this a poem or did you just drop a bar?

morganacanta:
And we walk together
Our face down and heavy
Our feets moist and cracked
Tapping like ants in an ant hill .

We weep for our future
We fear the unknown
We walk aimlessly
To a destination only our instincts can tell .

The whispers of the souls who were lost so early .
The blood stained foot prints.
The crying masses
The fallen agitators .

But joy must come in the morning
For the gift of life we closely cherish
For hope even in the face of burning volcano
For the unblemished youth of the new year .

Though all our tears might not be wiped ,
And our fears and pitfalls still standing on our path to success
We walk with a new aspiration
To wipe all the wrongs of the previous year .

Happy new year in advance .

What type of poem is this and what's the structure?

Which rhyme scheme did you use?

And I don't understand the run on lines here? It seem to be in every stanza if I'm not mistaken.

Kindly elucidate please?

Nubian113:
Hi guys... I think he gets it even though his ego won't allow him to admit it. Now let's not turn into bullies please. He errored you corrected now let him leave.

A lesson need to be learnt here, before you can critique a thing, you must have good knowledge about what you're critiquing.

I know for a fact morganacanta doesn't even know what critique even mean. He couldn't even identify the structure and type of poem posted, before he barged in and showed everyone his total lack of knowledge about what he is even critiquing.

The more he speaks, the more he reveals how empty headed he is when it comes to poetry. LMFAO.

llaykorn:
Can you see the one who told another person to stop writing poetry because he didn't write a sonnet or an ode?

When I saw you trying to critique other people's works in your rude and arrogance-filled style, I thought you would be able to write poetry without flaws. You're a big joke! You don't even know how to punctuate correctly.

You can't spell shrieking correctly.

You can't even spell encountered correctly.

You don't even know how to spell thorns.

You can't spell untattered correctly.

You can't spell tear-filled without error.

You don't even know when to use the comma or the full stop, or where to even place them.

You've been jumping around all day and you don't even know the difference between 'is' and 'it is'.

I'd severely punish my 12 year old brother for these mistakes. You should just stop trying to write poetry already. You won't get anywhere for all great poets were known with the most extreme of humility. You're an embarrassment to poetry and all the poets of the world; the living and the dead of them, if this is all you can offer. I can already see Robert Frost covering his face in shame for this balderdash you just posted.

Dude take it easy na. The dude is a troll. He would have done better not even attempting to write that mess up there. Lol.

E383:
Booked

Instead of booking, drop something... Lol.

JigsawKillah:
This man though
Make fûck no go kill you o

LOL. Its not about f#cking bruv. Just wanted to do something different from what's here... Lol.

oyinlolami:
Yes it is. Please give your email address. Would send immediately.

joseph1832@yahoo.com. Thanks for the gesture, you made my last day of the year.

emaculate99:
Llaykorn, I heard you didn't go to school and yet you are smart.
"And his ho-ho-ho gives
The ladies the blues"
Joseph, nice one.

Only llaykorn and I know what that line mean. Hehehe.

oyinlolami:
Oh dear. Do you have it now? I could send you a copy via mail if you don't.

No I don't. Please do, I wouldn't mind the kind gesture.

Is it an E-book?

[color=grey]Somewhere in Nigeria
There live a boy called llaykorn
Whose character is
As white as Santa's beards
Whose legacy will become
As old as Santa Claus
Who is a muslim
But every bit a christian
Who never went to school
But is still smarter than Einstein
Whose cheerful manner
Makes a rain deer smile
And his ho-ho-ho gives
The ladies the blues.[/color]


*dedicated to llaykorn

morganacanta:
Lol that's why the poem is atrocious because it fell into no type of poetry .
Is it a sonnet ,an epic or ode ?
Anyway I've finally decided the kind of poetry it is "it is called nonsensical rambling "

LMFAO. Please don't hurt yourself by saying what you know little or nothing about.

For your information, its a Free verse poem. And your decision about the type of poetry it is is lame as usual. Please again, learn to not speak about things you know absolutely nothing of.

Thanks.

whitecloth:
I understand the concept of your poem, but you have to work on it.

Poems don't have concept mister, themes or mood is what poems have, may be that's why you don't understand it.