Luvbooks's Posts

Nairaland Forum › Luvbooks's Profile › Luvbooks's Posts

1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 (of 8 pages)

Poems For Review › Re: Please Review This Short Story by luvbooks(op): 6:39am On Nov 27, 2011

daprofo:
Good piece of prose.For sake of space & technicality (I am using a mobile device herein)
I will enumerate my literary appreciation/critique:
1.) At the denotative level, your work is a good presentation of common domestic brouhaha and conflicts in the Nigerian society.As a writer, a work about your milieu, whether culturally or about metropolitan themes & motifs shows your readers and the literati that you have something worthwhile and important to tell; especially when it is carried out proficiently.I commend the exploitation of your milieu in this work.
2.) The story is one the average reader can identify with. Luvbooks, well I don't know your name because you didn't put one except an alias, your plot is exceptionally great in that you could tell us events that transpired outside this scene and even in the scene in so short a space.Damilola's infidelity for instance is traceable to his father's.That's a brief allusion, or let's call it foreshadow.You successfully compacted all.There is also an allusion to Bolade, and Damilola's friends' influence over Damilola.That's more like the common peer pressure and identity crisis issues amongst teenagers, and youths.Damilola is inexperienced, that's quite conspicuous in the story
3.) Your characters are quite intelligent.They disagree however.So we see the conflict, we get the tension.Damilola's mother is protective, not much of a nagging type but motherly concern.She has painful memories of Damilola's father.She is helpless because the conflict doesn't unravel and Damilola ends up being a cheat on his wife.Age on her side, she feels that is equivalent to experience on marital affairs.Hear her, "you never understand why I left your father. .".Her intelligence again is seen in her definition of two types of mothers. Damilola conversely is young and rash.Acts on instincts and other people's philosophy.If Afolayan's son Bolade and others did it, then it is right, he argues.He is quite intelligent but not in our eyes but in his own eyes.
3.) LUVBOOKS, your diction is one the reader can follow easily.The words are simple.Not much underlying or symbolic meanings.There is a proverb of apple but I wonder if its African : I mean the proverb.It is a sentimental aphorism of pop culture , so I think,

While I have appraised the work, let me do a brief criticism:
1.) What is the title of your story?
2.) The philosophy of the language, in terms of syntax and sentencial renderings falls short of standard contemporary works.The verbs are quite common and trite but it doesn't affect the efficacy of the work.
3.) The work ends without proper unravelling.
4.) Little description of your setting.You need work on that.Give background poetic or prosaic description, ok, LUVBOOKS.
5.) The starting shows Dami as the initiator of the argument.There is nothing wrong with this but if you ask me, I would've expected Dami's mother to assail his acts.However starting your work with a conversation is a plus. . Do write plays? You would be a good playwright.Take care.

O. SAM
Port Harcourt.
[prof_brimaniee@yahoo.com]

Thank you for everything you said. I appreciate the time you took in writing something of substance about this story. I had already forgotten about the story to be honest, mostly because I knew it would definitely fall short in some areas but had no idea what those were.

1) The title of the story is still pending. I wanted to call it "Rotten Apples" but I felt that that would be overdoing it. So I'm still trying to decide what to call it.

2) Sorry I've lost you here. I'm trying to google what syntax means but the internet is so bad. Please explain further.

3) When you say proper unravelling, what do you mean? I suppose I could have done something where the wife comes in and there's this huge drama which ends in them forgiving each other and this getting back together. But I felt that that was too cliché. In a lot of situations like this one, there is no happy ending. What I wanted to create here is the reality of life ; some things never change. Either one person refuses to learn , or the other refuses to forgive. I also wanted to demonstrate that sometimes you can teach your children all you know and they still end up disappointing you.

4) Yes thats true. I didnt put in enough about the setting. I'll try to revamp the story and add some more settings to it though.

5) The reason why I let Dami start the discussion was because I wanted to show how a person will be completely wrong in his actions and still expect others to justify his behaviour. Dami feels guilty for what he did but he doesn't want to acknowledge this so he uses his friend's example as emotional blackmail on his mother. If his mother had approached the topic first, that would have put him instantly in his place and the guilt would have overwhelmed him and made him keep quiet. I wanted him to be able to speak, because his misplaced anger where he blames his mother instead of himself is actually the crux of the story.

Thanks very much once again.

Computers › I'm Really Worried , Please Help. by luvbooks(op): 4:19pm On Jun 27, 2011

Can someone help me please!!!!!

I need to get into my bf's email account. On a normal day i don't check his email or any of his private things even though i have had his password but he's been acting so strange lately, and I abandoned the idea of trusting him especially now that he apparently stole some of my money. And at first i had his password but now he's changed it and I'm really scared . I don't know what to do or what's going on in his life anymore. I suspec that he took the money to buy gifts for another girl but I'm not sure, and I'm really so confused please help me.

Poems For Review › Re: Think U'r Smart, Tyr Dis by luvbooks(f): 5:13pm On Jun 24, 2011

the girl is blind and so her book is in Braille and therefore doesnt need light.

Jobs/Vacancies › Is It Possible For Me To Get A Job? by luvbooks(op): 12:12pm On Jun 24, 2011

Hi!

I think I may be graduating with a third, and I need some advice. I studied Law in the UK and I'm wondering . . . will any employers in Nigeria accept me with a third class degree even though i studied aborad?
I'm trying to decide what my options are ; whether to go and redo my degree or try to get a job.
And before anyone says I wasnt concentrating hard enough on my studies, somethings happened that were out of my control and really affected me throughout my second and third year.
I appreciate any constructive replies in advance.

Poems For Review › Please Review This Short Story by luvbooks(op): 11:55am On Jun 24, 2011

Hi! Please criticize and rate on a scale of 1 to 10. Make sure to point out the flaws and whether I have any potential as a writer.

Story Begins Here ;

“Wait, mum.”

The sound of her son’s voice stopped her in her tracks.

She stopped and turned to face him.

He looked up, hurt and angry. “Why aren’t you supporting me in this?”

“How do you expect me to support you when you’ve done something wrong?”

“I’m just saying that all I’ve done is what my friends say is normal for a guy! ” The resentment he felt against her had pushed him to his feet. ” I mean, when Bolade did the same thing , his mother backed him up and even told his wife to accept his actions. I thought you would do the same! “.

“So what you’re basically saying is that you did this because your friends told you it was okay? This was not how I raised you, Dami. “

“It’s not about my friends. This is what guys do! I can’t think of any of my friends who hasn’t done the same thing and didn’t get away with it!”

“Then it IS about your friends.”

He sighed in frustration.

“Mrs. Afolayan has shown that she is an extremely unreasonable woman. She has shown this time and again, so what you’ve just said to me now is no surprise. There are two types of mothers; the ones who make their sons believe that every woman is to worship the ground that they walk on, and those who help their children understand the difference between right and wrong. I am not Bolade Afolayan’s mother and even if I was, I would never support what you have just done.”

“But you support my wife for throwing me out? Of my own house? And parading around with some other guy?! “

“I don’t support either of you. But the bottom line is , that you cheated on her. If she decides to do the same, then you are perfectly entitled to whatever punishment she dishes out to you. Now get some sleep.”

“But why? Why should I deserve this?"

She looked at her hard-headed son, so much like his father in his relentless stubbornness , and her eyes softened. For that split second, she could only feel sympathy for him. And for herself.

But when she spoke again, her tone was bitter. “You never understood why I left your father, did you? I left him for the same reason. Because he did exactly what you did to your wife. But as far as you were concerned, he was your precious father. And he could do no wrong.”

“That’s completely different”, he snapped.

“Why?” she asked , with a raised eyebrow and a cynical smile. “Because you’re a human being and I’m not?”.

There was only silence after that.

“The rotten apple never falls far away from the tree ” , someone had once told her. She had laughed when she first heard it. But that time, that laughter, was a long time ago. And the rotten apple stood right in front of her.

She had tried. Tried so hard to make sure that she didn’t become his father. And yet there he stood in front of her, mocking all her efforts to make him a good man.

But what if that was the reason why she had failed? What if she had tried too hard?

She shook her head and said in a much softer tone, “Go to sleep, Damilola. It’s late.”

And she switched off the lights and walked away, leaving him standing alone in the darkness.

Literature › Short Story. by luvbooks(op): 10:48pm On Jun 23, 2011

Culture › Re: Why Do Nigerian Guys Like To Gossip? by luvbooks(f): 9:31pm On Jun 23, 2011

"Naija guys don't gossip, we only discuss" . . .

YEAH RIGHT!!!!!!

Education › Re: Will The Nigerian Law School Take Someone With A Third Class From A Uk Uni? by luvbooks(op): 7:21pm On Jun 05, 2011

why has it been locked?

Education › Re: Will The Nigerian Law School Take Someone With A Third Class From A Uk Uni? by luvbooks(op): 7:18pm On Jun 05, 2011

Because their entry reqirements ask for a pass and i thought that a third is not technically a pass. It's more like a fail. That was just mu opinion.

Anyway thanks. I didn't know they took people with thirds from Nigerian Uni's.

Education › Will The Nigerian Law School Take Someone With A Third Class From A Uk Uni? by luvbooks(op): 7:13pm On Jun 05, 2011

Hi

I'm not a nairlaand member and luvbooks has said i can use her account, to post a topic so here goes! ;

I may be graduating with a third from law. and I have studied in a british uni but i want to go to law school. I was just wondering what the situation would be if my resluts come out to be a third. Will the nigerian law school admit me? I have called their helplines but they never answer the phone and one of their numbers is always switched off.

Thanks.

Romance › Re: Why Do Wives/ Husbands by luvbooks(f): 9:41pm On Apr 06, 2010

Akainzo:
Now I know where your barbarism comes from.

It is not only written but you should be able to read about it once you start to read the book yourself. The Holy Book is replete with instances where the Lords prophet had more than one wife.

So in essence if the man says it is for having children, then you accept that he can have more than one?

The bolded part above tells me where the fountain of your reply came from and thus is understandable. However, I am educated enough to know the difference between emotions and reality. And my dear, the reality is simple a lady Prof would hold onto her husband and find it easier to forgive his infidelity than a guy prof would.

I presume you are educated and therefore would also assume that you would have learnt that with education comes different perspective of the same idea or theory, it doesn't make the other person less educated or in need of more education. Use the knowledge you acquired from the education you got.

Dude, you were the one who claimed that the Holy Book is where you can find the reason why men find it harder to forgive than women do. You also said that women could only be faithful to one person but on the other hand men did not have to.
All I did is disprove your argument.
And I also dont see any reason why you should imply that women have more of a responsibility to be loyal to their partners. Your argument made me very angry so that would explain the emotion bit. Being educated does not stop you from getting angry. And by the way, your argument of knowing the difference between emotions and reality is a bit silly because emotions ARE a reality. No amount of education can change that.

Also how can you claim that several prophets had more than one wife and that means others should do the same? The same Bible says that "A man shall leave his father and mother and cleave unto this wife, and they shall become one flesh". You cannot become ONE FLESH with several other people. A kingdom divided cannot stand.

Besides, prophets if you can remember correctly, was the Old Testament. Dont pick and choose principles of the Bible. You enjoy the salvation that Jesus gave us and the fact that he freed us from having to

Romance › Re: I Want To Use Black Magic To Get Her by luvbooks(f): 1:41am On Apr 06, 2010

ayettymama:
oleeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

wiiiiiiiiiiiiiiinsh

*praying profusely and sweating* "The Lord sayeth . . . touch not my anoiiiiiiiiiinted! And blaspheme not against my prophets . . . !!!" (Or is it do my prophets no harm . . .? I cant remember oooo ewoo , , )

Romance › Re: I Want To Use Black Magic To Get Her by luvbooks(f): 1:36am On Apr 06, 2010

ayettymama:
oleeeeeeeeeeeeeee- tif tif tif!!
see your mout

i will use free palm oil!

I no b tif naaa . . . I am just GOD's messenger. grin

Romance › Re: I Want To Use Black Magic To Get Her by luvbooks(f): 1:30am On Apr 06, 2010

Everybody repeat after me . . .

HOLY GHOST fire!!!!!

Burn them!

HOLY GHOST fire!!!!!

Burn them!

Pray this prayer every midnight before you go to sleep. Don't forget to buy the 200 naira anointing oil o! God Bless you all. It is well.

Romance › Re: Why Do Wives/ Husbands by luvbooks(f): 1:06am On Apr 06, 2010

Akainzo:
This is a function of how the Lord have created us all.

Check all through the holy books, it is written, no two men can share a woman; for there cannot be two captains in a boat.

The reason is simple, unto whom is the woman that has cheated loyal to? the husband or the boyfriend? A man cannot live not knowing that his wife is loyal to him.

A wife on the other hand has to be loyal to someone. She can decide to be loyal to the husband and thus forgive him and moves on, or can repudiate her loyalty to him and packs out of the house.
,

Akainzo:
BrownJay, you need not wonder for too long if you do actually take time to read the good book you allude to. When you finish it from Genesis to Revelation, then come back and tell me where you read it that the good Lord chastised a man or any of His prophets for having more than one wife.
(You can study the prophets and do a check on how many of them had only one wife! - And before you miss out on the assignment, note that you need not commit adultery to have more than one wife.)

If you had taken time to comprehend what I wrote, I did not in any way say one was right or that the other was wrong. I only presented an analysis of the actions that is inbred in both sexes. You can agree with it or better still try and disprove it.

BTW, you did reply to the scenarios that you couldn't comprehend despite your not too smart to attempt to disguise it. Hmmm, on the dumb scale, do measure yourself when you come round to understand what a scale is.

You should be severely massacred for this statement.

So in the Holy Books it is also written that one man can share two women . . . right?
Our pastor once showed us the difference in the Bible between the wives and the mistresses. When it says that a man knew a woman, it meant that she was his wife, but if she was a mistress then the Bible expressly states that the man in question lay with her.
And in most of those circumstances the only reason why he even had a mistress in the first place was for him to have more children. Not because his boxers were about to explode.
The first scenario I can remember of that ever happening was with Abraham and Hagar. Why did Sarah ask him to sleep with her? Because she wanted a child. I am not saying that this applies in every instance but MOST OF THE TIME, that was the reason.

Or what about the prophet who was told to take a wife who was a harlot and be faithful to her even though she kept going back to her old lifestyle? If God was an advocate of two or three wives, would't he have said "My son, I know this woman is gonna show you hell!!! So take another lady and be sleeping with her to satisfy yourself until that naughty lady comes back . "

This idea that women are a commodity has to be gotten rid of . It nauseates me. Even Jesus said that in some circumstances, it is better not to get married. Why would he advocate a single life when he knows very well that his future wife to be was the Church itself? Because He knows what men and women are like, he knows that humans lack self control , and he knows the number of heartbreaks that come out of men cheating, marrying other wives or women doing the exact same thing.

Or it is also written that a woman can live with knowing that her husband is unfaithful to her? Come on. Get educated because you are clearly not.

Music/Radio › Re: I Am Ashamed Of Naija Retarded Music by luvbooks(f): 7:26pm On Apr 03, 2010

I think what the poster is trying to say is that there has to be better things to sing about than getting high, doing yahoo- yahoo and the sexiest girl at the party who you want to sleep with.

But its not just Naija , its all over the world. Take Lady Gaga for example. She has a very good voice. But do her songs make any sense? No. Why?
Being sensible doesnt sell. Not anymore , at least. What sells in the music industry nowadays is being vacuous, empty - headed , and absolute lunacy.

I don't think its an accident that the music industry has turned into what it is. Sometimes I think these songs are sung on purpose to dumb down the public's awareness.

However I think we should all try to remember that for every Kelly Handsome singing I love that Pussycat, there is an upcoming Dare Art Alade singing Not the Girl . . .

Romance › Re: Do You Think She Is Still Interested. by luvbooks(f): 11:07pm On Mar 30, 2010

sect:
You took a break from her cos of your predicament, she gets angry for not being with her during your low period. That means u r at fault and deserved the cold treatment she meted out on you and she thinks she cant have a future with you cos of how you treated her but after all these, you realised your mistake, you sent sincere apologies to her, tried to re-establish your relationship with her after regaining your job and made the effort of going to abuja to apologise in person. Now after all these, she's still furious with you and cant even forgive you, then i dont think you have a future with her either, she doesnt have the spirit of forgiving and that means if you make a mistake in the future, she wont forgive you. If i were u, i'd send a detailed message to her and let her know you are disappointed with her, you made a mistake just like everyone does in a relationship and she cant forgive you, tell her also that you cant have a future with a woman who has an unforgiving character. Abeg 4get about her and move one jooo. . . get another girl and be sure to treat her nicely so u dont make the same mistake twice, you cant kill urself cos of one lady. Gudluck. . .

God is on the side of the OP that he did not see this post . This is all it takes to arouse a wounded ego.

Romance › Re: Some Guys No Dey Try At All by luvbooks(f): 10:29pm On Mar 30, 2010

He was most likely trying to impress his mates (i.e. you) . It happens when guys feel ashamed of themselves so they try to find a way to make up for it by lying and pretending it has never happened to them before.

Dating And Meet-up Zone › Re: Gentlemens Club.....you are all welcome. by luvbooks(f): 5:17pm On Mar 29, 2010

kokonets:
Erm Doyin na who u dey call bouncer! wen dat one start?

*** And here I was thinking I was going to be thrown out ****

Heaves a sigh of relief . . .

Dating And Meet-up Zone › Re: Gentlemens Club.....you are all welcome. by luvbooks(f): 5:05pm On Mar 29, 2010

doyin13:
wetin happen?. . . .u carry too much cement today?

Now THAT was funny. lol . . .

Dating And Meet-up Zone › Re: Gentlemens Club.....you are all welcome. by luvbooks(f): 5:01pm On Mar 29, 2010

doyin13:
Nah. . .I will let the bouncer do that.

KOKONET, . . . .KOKONET OO. . . BIA
Come and deal with this impostor

*** Bouncer is still busy dealing with benz190 . . .***

Maybe you should call him again later . . . but in the meantime . . . lets enjoy ourselves cheesy

Dating And Meet-up Zone › Re: Gentlemens Club.....you are all welcome. by luvbooks(f): 4:53pm On Mar 29, 2010

doyin13:
Of course I do. . . .

makes you a genius.

To your tent lady. . .Oya start going to the library

Can you imagine . . . I came here to take a break and this is what I get!

E no good ooo . . . cry

Anyway, I'm not leaving . . . unless you intend to chase me out yourself . grin

Dating And Meet-up Zone › Re: Gentlemens Club.....you are all welcome. by luvbooks(f): 4:45pm On Mar 29, 2010

doyin13:
Books and gentlemen's club no mix. . .

Don't you think you are in the wrong venue, ?

All books and no play . . .

You know the rest. wink

Dating And Meet-up Zone › Re: Gentlemens Club.....you are all welcome. by luvbooks(f): 4:38pm On Mar 29, 2010

@ Luizworld ; A glass of cold water will be just fine, thanks.

benz190:
lol, @what the babe is tinking 2 herself

and shouts out loud**

are you mistaken your cheeks for that of the bartender!

Haba . . . stop slapping the bartender now . . . he just wants to give you your drink. I don't know why you are attacking the poor guy.

*** Lack of security personnel in this place is sad, just sad. ***

kokonets:
Lbooks how u doing?

***At last! A reasonable person to talk to . . . unlike that agbero over there . . . grin

***

I'm doing just fine , thanks. And you?

Dating And Meet-up Zone › Re: Gentlemens Club.....you are all welcome. by luvbooks(f): 4:03pm On Mar 29, 2010

benz190:
[size=15pt]SLAP, **[/size]

THis one that ive been standing here just for chap man!!
and u are looking @ me with thoes your tiny eyes!

rubbish

[size=15pt]ANOTHER SLAP**[/size]

*** Looking at the crazy guy trying to slap me but in reality slapping the bartender***

This place doesn't even look like it has a manager
I wish someone would serve this guy so he would stop screaming . . . I'm not interested in going deaf before the age of 20.

Dating And Meet-up Zone › Re: Gentlemens Club.....you are all welcome. by luvbooks(f): 3:46pm On Mar 29, 2010

*** Still waiting for my drink***

kokonets:
Hi luvbooks

Hi kokonets . . . .

Dating And Meet-up Zone › Re: Gentlemens Club.....you are all welcome. by luvbooks(f): 3:01pm On Mar 29, 2010

*** Walks in , eyes the bar and some certain individuals screaming for their drink ***

Can I have a glass of cold water please . . . ? Thanks.

Romance › Re: In Pursuit Of Happiness--will You Take Her Back? by luvbooks(f): 2:47pm On Mar 29, 2010

Your topic is "In pursuit of happiness" . . . meaning happiness is what you really want.

If she is the only one whom you THINK can make you truly happy, take her back but keep an eye out just in case she decides to walk out again. If that ever happens I guess you'll have learned the second time around.

This is the only scenario where I would ever advocate someone having a Plan B.

Romance › Re: I Need Ur Help (one Night Stand) by luvbooks(f): 8:44pm On Mar 28, 2010

And you guys are actually believing this huh

?
Sounds like a fable to me. shocked

Romance › Re: Please Write An Open Letter To Your Ex by luvbooks(f): 7:33pm On Mar 26, 2010

@ Abygurl ; I don't think Kitlady was talking to you. She quoted v3 and mallorca in her post. So it was probably THEM she was referring to.

Gbasso:
Dear Miss (Mrs.) G. E. O,

I am so sorry for dumping you just three months after I slept with you. I never told you that my 'love' for you faded after you opened your honey put for me. For sure, I missed the hot kisses and waist twisting you offered me countless nights we shared together. One thing I so much detested about you was your endless complaints about my non-commitment to the 'relationship' you so much envied.

I never wished to be a stepfather and your revelations of those two kids you had in your teens were a complete repellant to me. Remember our trip by December 2008, how we screwed all through the night even in the presence of my friend, who slept on the cushion? You never respected s.ex in anyway. How the hell you sucked the hell out of my cork that cool night at alpha beach was mind blowing, but all you did to endear me to you only showed how much you don’t respect s.ex and this scared me real. I hope your present guy treasures you and does not think of leaving you sooner than I did? My advice for you is to have respect for that hole inbtw your legs and treat s.ex with some decorium. say no sometimes atleast to earn some respects for urself. I still got those videos and fotos, how foolish u were to ve used my camera to vidio our nudes and left them wt me. u re such a disgrace to womenhood.

For sure, I miss your dishes, but with get GREAT relief from you naggingsand sloutful ways

I hope I never come across an animal in the form of a human being like you.

Romance › Re: Are Girls Really That Gullible? by luvbooks(f): 7:22pm On Mar 26, 2010

https://www.nairaland.com/nigeria/topic-420153.0.html

Girls have been made gullible by ideas such as these.

@Il Duce;

HA HA HA . . . undecided

Family › Re: Do I Have To Confess My Adultery To My Spouse? by luvbooks(f): 5:15pm On Mar 23, 2010

eldee:
The partner is not affected till he/she knows.

The simple truth is . . . telling him/her will cause the partner to make irrational decisions through emotions.

This is a simple case of Stirring unnecessary trouble V Going on with the marriage

Actually, the partner IS affected. They just don't know it yet.

What you just said is like saying that if someone has HIV / AIDS, then the virus doesn't affect them until they go for a doctor's appointment.

I personally have a great dislike for this argument because it's extremely one-sided. This is because of so many things. Such as friends, relatives, neighbours. And every single one of those people will lose respect for you and your spouse one way or the other once they get wind of it. Cheating doesn't just affect the cheater, it affects the person who was cheated on because you expose her to such comments like
" Maybe she's not good enough in bed" and so on.
Just by a few persons knowing that you have cheated on your significant other , you put your whole marriage under a microscope. And if that person is unfortunate enough to hear it from others then you are in for double trouble because not only do they get to hear the facts, they also hear the other person's opinion. And God help you if the person telling them doesn't like you.

1 Like

1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 (of 8 pages)