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[quote author=frank3.16 link=topic=333610.msg8058967#msg8058967 date=1302028591]hi @maedan, jut got your post. i am glad tht u like it. however i just did some editing myself and changed a whole lot in the story. eg: i made sure there was a group who called themselves the saviour, whose mission was to protect the information about the black bead and ensur that instructions to protect and destroy the black bead the the right time.

then in part 2, i didnt make emeka disbelieve his father when he heard about the bead, instead he was initiated into the saviours, and helped in tracking down Mark. but he was dissapointed when mark's child was born and he wasnt the god, of course unknown to him mark and the saviour the child had been born out of wedluck. Emeka was also dissapointed when he found out that the bead was lost and mark wasnt affected and bothered.

infact, these few changes resulted in a whole lot of changes. i also changed some grammertical errors that i saw, ohhhhh there were a whole lot of them.

@adebayo201,

i will see what i can do.

the two books are currently undergoing serious edition, i hope all works out as i am planningthanks.[/quote]Wow can't imagine why you should change anything, the story was perfect!! Well I guess you can play around with it, but don't change too much of it! I really thought that "god" alaogoba whatever is a really funny villain, the way he was just killing pple anyhow . I wish it could be made into a movie, it will really SELL!!! Why don't you try and show one of these big producers a part of it, with a summary of the storyline? Keep it up!

adebayo201:
Hw i wsh frank is here 2read al dex comment nd 2 knw dat im naw a change pason

mistrex maedan, pls wud u 4ward dat buk 2my email since frank wasnt here? Ideal.adebayo@yahoo.co.uk or idadebayo19@gmail.com.
I'l b xpectin it mistrex!

lol I'm sorry can't do that, I have no permission to share his manuscript. He was online lately so I guess he's very active, you can send him a message or something. Cheers!

Hello frank

First of all I'd like to thank you for sending me your work, The Tenth Commandment. Due to several demands on my time (even my leisure time), I didn't get round to reading your book till now. I mean it was there lying inside my laptop, for MONTHS, then I transferred it to my mobi-reader app on my Blackberry thinking: ONE DAY.

And then one fateful afternoon on a trip to visit my relatives in Ife, I decided to open up the book. And my goodness, it was fantastic!! I've finished it and even asked my sister to read it. I know she will derive as much pleasure as I have.


I had to take the time to search out this thread, just to tell you all this. I will still try to find your email and thank you personally and apologize for taking so long. It was almost my loss.

It would be fantastic if you got it published (after editing of course), but it is one of the most enjoyable pieces of fiction I have read this year. Well done friend! And thanks!

I no know wetin to talk, whether na please or sorry
No be say I no get time abi na so so worry worry
In any case, I no get excuse
If I apologize abeg no refuse
Accept my pele ontop of no vex
E no too late, make we continue d flex

RuuDie:
she say she lekpa & her name be Arita,
wen i see d picsure i halla dis wan na confirm Mama Sita,
i block am 4 facebook begin follow am 4 twitter,
4 my mind i don jam betta chica bonita,
pesin wen go come make my life sweeter,
broom 2 sweep all d dorty & make me neater,
2 God i miscalculate like NEPA meter,
d levelz don become be leaf wen 2 bitter,
matta don turn 2 work of factory fitter,
no near dis wan if u sey u be wife-beater,
cuz 2 carry am sef u gats 2 be weightlifter,
d yam leg thick like 50 liter,
see g-string get space like 14-seater,
wafi boy no fit ever be repeater,
so i sharpenly deny am 3 times like peter,
come codedly pick race like cheetah
nna men. . . .no be lie oh - if no be gold e no go glitter!

hehehehehhe

like say this rhyme na im wake me from sleep
i come dey pray "the Lord my soul to keep"
this one na good way to start the year 20eleven
Make we all pray say na here go be our pidgin haven

E no good if I forget to drop in some wishes
To all who dey flex for snow or inside d sunny beaches
Merry Xmas, Happy New Year in advance
Make you continue to enjoy d holiday dance

lagbaja20:
One of the best writers out there!

Seconded, thirded and fourthed!!!LOL

Gosh pple are WICKED!
Na so this world just dey crooked!
Person born pickin, na another person wipe am out
Na to enter my room go pray cos I no fit shout
All the hala for this world no go bring Bawo back
Make I just carry all my vex put inside sack
Chrismass dey come, make we put smile for we face
And make we hope say dis world go be a beta place!!!

Nice one firestar but I no jus dey in d mood
I come hear one news wey no too good
One of our brother for this NL family
Lose im life to some unseen wicked enemy
Anyway e go remind us to always dey careful
To love eachother and to always dey respectful
All those yeye beef and ranting for here
Make we stop am and show say we care!!

firestar:
Heh.
Maedan:
Ma sista,
-
Ma head dey swell. . .
I beg, make I bash ma head ontop congo drum make dat koko go down well.
-
As for Rotimi
Where im dey?
I miss ma egbon from anoda mista.
.

Abeg oh, babes, no bang ur head for congo
As u dey add sweetness to dis our pidgin bongo
U know oyibo talk say, the more the merrier
Na for here pple dey come cool off from NL mass hysteria

firestar:
Ruudie. . . Hold on bro,
-
Di meds wey yu take ehn,
-
Hope say na doctor prescribe am o?
-
Ehen make I scatter yua yarn,
'Cos I no be boti and dem no born me for barn!
-
Yu go get correcshun o!
Yu
Go
Get!
-
All join di advice wey elders give me,
Yu
Go
Collect!
-
First,
Yu no go get hypertenshun: na ma praya be dat.
Second,
Now e be like I get yua 'attenshun': Go hug one of PHCN's faulty high tension.
Shebi yua brain don sharge?
Oya nau, no say I harsh,
na ma request be dat.
-
If I say:
I love yu,
No be dat one wey yu write.
Asha sef sing dat kain 'luv' for 'Subway',
Or na lie she dey lie?
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Yu be ma broda as ma sista Maedan dey too.
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If yu catch ma drift ma broda,
Know say I love her and odas as I love yu.

thanks firestar for your nice pidgin pile
e be like say i dey enjoy this your new style
u don bring a different flavour to our local jive
make you no stop, still dey drop am for us live!!!

lindalee:
My girl maedan your rhymes are tight
your flow eversince, dey make my heart delight
abeg no stop to the shine your light
cos your future em dey super bright

wow, many thanks to my babe lindalee
the more you look, the more you go see
as you come show a token of your appreciation
I go receive the compliment with plenty jubilation

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I jus say make I pop in come congratulate
All those wey dey show face dey regulate
No how, no how, this thread go always be,
So long as we dey get feed from both oldies and newbies