prettydiva89:

okay

So, she seats with me and gosh, inspiration overflow insyd my body.
Updatex cming soon!

. ==EPISODE 16==
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. Ade was on his bed giving thoughts to the recent happenings around him. He stared blankly at the ceiling and reminisced thoughtfully.
'
. "In the next 72 hours, i'l be free from the tight clutches of U.T.M.E that has been kinda holding me down, then, hmmmmm,freedom, i smell freedom." He mused at his exciteness and he wished saturday get here as fast as possible.
'
. His happiness contained a tinge of sadness though, Lizabeth's examination center wasn't within Lagos and thus had to leave for Osun today.
'
. "Why Osun? There'r a lot of centers here in Lagos, i wonder why she chosed Osun earlier. Had i known before then, i'l have convince her then." he thought sadly.
'
. He took a trip down the memory lane right from the day he officially turned Lizabeth's shining armour, he remembered how happy he was when he got home and the situation he met at home. "Ow" he groaned and tried to shut that event out of his mind but his brain seemed not to conjure with him.
'
. That earlier memory seemed to have trigger his brain as it kept retracing that particular event he was trying so hard to forget.
'
. He remembered all that had been going on between he and Kemi since then, he had always felt uncomfortable and uneasy whenever she was in sight. It would have been better if she felt the same and try to avoid him but she didn't. Instead, she had been trying to get down with him maybe she was feeling insecure and had thought He would rattle out on her and hence decided to trap or bribe him to keep his mouth mum.
'
. He still remembered vividly her last attempt. He would have given in to the tempting offer he was being offered but only God knows how he had been able to fight it off;
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--To Be Continued--

. =CONTINUATION=

. He was in the living room having a siesta on one of the huge 'Three-settee when he started feeling that an almost familiar but also strange intoxicating sensation was sweeping through his body. He had opened his eyes calculatedly to figure out what was going on. What he saw wasn't really bad but was really strange, here was Kemi handling and caressing his bare chest in a tight body hugged transparent top exposing her bossoms coupled with a short and skimpy skirt that could easily pass for a mini-skirt giving him that sensation he had always craved for.
'
. "Brother Ade, you might be uncomfortable sleeping here, why don't you let me help you in.". She had said when she noticed he was awake.
'
. He stared at her lustily and hungrily but soon got irritated when he remembered how J-boy (The name of the guy he saw with her ) screwed her mercilessly buttered by the thought that Lizabeth won't be pleased with it if she gets to know bout it.
" She could even be infected.". He thought.
. He wanted to say "yes" but instead asked her angrily "Where's my shirt?".
. He wore his shirt he didn't remember pulling before sleeping and walked to his room angrily.
'
. "Hmm Lizabeth, i love you" Ade found himself saying.
.
--To Be Continued--

I sight u@ supbaby,supbaby1

Thronekid i don show, waiting dey sup here na, i miss any story here?

Sweetdreamer:
Thronekid i don show, waiting dey sup here na, i miss any story here?

Brother, u neva miss o, we xtil dy on it?
Wetin u nid na?

thronekid:

Brother, u neva miss o, we xtil dy on it?
Wetin u nid na?

lols, i know say i never miss and no be today i start to follow this story la!

Sweetdreamer:
lols, i know say i never miss and no be today i start to follow this story la!

[size=19pt]Yu'r welcome bro[/size]

. '==EPISODE 17==
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. Ade ran in. He was all smiles, anyone who saw him needn't no soothsayer to tell he was happy.
'
. "Now that i'm done with jamb, i'm as free as a bird, free as a bird. Now i can take Lizabeth on countless date, yeah i can" He thought.
'
. He remembered the stress he had gone through in preparation for the so called Jamb.
'
. His brain recollected the struggle experienced just to board a vehicle to convey him to Idumota, where the exam was held. He had to join in the struggle and almost got himself injured when he was pushed by a rough looking good-for-nothing tout. On that occasion, he broke one of his rules; he acted like a russian.
. He could still hear the irritating humming sound of mosquitoes that launched several attacks on him just like avalanche during the night before the exam as He had spent friday's night there to avoid 'stories that touch' more than superstory itself as he heard some random guys say.
.
--To Be Continued--

. ==CONTINUATION==
'
. The exams commenced by 10:00am after they had underwent several process; the bio-metrics, the security search and lots more. At a point, he wondered if the exam would still hold that day.
. An incident that occured during the exams was something he would never forget; He was sitting not too far from a damsel's locker, he hadn't been able to concentrate since he saw her, she looked just like an angel and he would have wooed her since his arrival yesterday but for Lizabeth's beautiful face that kept popping into his head.
. However, as luck would have it, they happened to be in the same hall, he had completed his papers but was just taking a survey of the entire hall when he noticed the damsel's discomfort. He activated sherlock holmes mode and found out she was having some difficulties with her math's exam. Cunningly but carefully, he helped her out.
'
. As they left the exam hall, he couldn't but take notice of how sumptous her butt was, how big her bossoms were, how straight her legs were and how pretty her face was. He just couldn't help it anymore and decided to hook up with her.
'
. He got to know that her name was Victory, stays in lekki phase 2, not that far from Ade's house, bla bla bla.
'
. They grabbed some snacks on Ade and ate together like they were old acquaintances.
. Another struggle ensued when they were about to board a vehicle but unlike when he was coming, he acted gentlemanly just to impress Victory, they waited for it to dissolve before boarding the bus, besides, they were not in an hurry to get home.
'
. They alighted from the bus and departed but not after they had exchanged numbers and he had promised to call her very soon.
'
. "Ow, i have to call Lizabeth.". He thought.
'
. He freshened up, had his lunch and dialed Lizabeth's number, she picked on the 2nd beep.
After some pleasantries, she told Ade something and all he could say was
"What?".
. Saying this, he slumped on his bed.'
'
. --To Be continued--

kingphilip:
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thronekid I've honored ur invitation Just increase the length of ur updates

Been long o, [size=30pt]hope no prob.[/size]

vonn:

Thanks..
I'll make out time.

Been long o cutie, [size=19pt]HOPE NTHN IZ WRNG?[/size]

tecno4life:


I'm busy sir, will find a couple of minutes to check it out pls

Been long Boss, [size=19pt]HOPE NO PROB.?[/size]

Bluestarry:
....peeping in.... Whats happening here?

A Lot! Been long bro, [size=19pt]hope nothing iz wrng?[/size]

Nancydearie:
#Following#

Nancydearie, itx been long,i sincerely hope everything's fine.
Missin u here!

dicefrost:
Read......... I think you should calm down and give the story more vibe. It looks rushed. Try to be descriptive, tell us more about your characters, their environment etc. Engage our imagination else the story will be boring. tell the story as if you are watching it. You may want to watch your grammar too. My 2cents

Been long bro, hope nthn iz wrng?

TiffanyJ:

I'm here. Let me read this story first

Been long o cutie, hope nthn z wrng?

SuperMartins:
am ere bro

Long tym boss,hope all is well?

thronekid:

Been long Boss, [size=19pt]HOPE NO PROB.?[/size]

no chance ooh
make I use this opportunity go through am abeg

tecno4life:


no chance ooh
make I use this opportunity go through am abeg

Tanx bro

thronekid:

Long tym boss,hope all is well?

Bless bro..not so strong but we bless Jah,am alive.. Hws u bro

thronekid:

Nancydearie, itx been long,i sincerely hope everything's fine.
Missin u here!

Sorry dear,i have been quite busy,plz bear with me. Hope u are ok?

Hmmmmmm

Nancydearie:
Sorry dear,i have been quite busy,plz bear with me. Hope u are ok?

I am, just nid u here buh first tinz first, u just try t be here wen possible,wil u?

SuperMartins:
Bless bro..not so strong but we bless Jah,am alive.. Hws u bro

I'm gud, hope everithin z unda cntrol nw?

tecno4life:


no chance ooh
make I use this opportunity go through am abeg

Ok o broda

thronekid:

Been long o cutie, hope nthn z wrng?

so so sorry sir, I took long to comment. Just like d9ty7 and others said, you were rushing the story at first and left out important information-description, but I'm glad you're working on these flaws.
I observed something very important that you've left out. Suspence is an important ingredient in writing and your work lack it. Every reader want an update that will make them yarn for more, something to always wish you will update five times in a day. You need to build up suspense in your work for it is what makes readers ask for more.
Again, I observed that you use the flashback method in narating your story but you are over doing it. Why not take your time, organize your plot and narrate it in sequencial order instead of rushing it through flashback?
Furthermore, I might have missed something but if not, what happened to Lizabeth's father. I can't remember you saying anything about him. Is he alive or dead?
I thought you wrote that Jenny is Ade's aunty's daughter? If that is the case, they are cousins. Is it possible that he dated his cousins? You pictured her as a girl who was sexually abused, what really happened or will you re-introduce her as the story unfold and tell us more about her character?
You really are doing great, just know that you've got a follower for I shall follow this story to the end. It's your first story and you are simply amazing.
Oh, and again, where does Ade mother work? Is she so wealthy as to give a seventeen year old five thousand naira to spend for a day?

TiffanyJ:

so so sorry sir, I took long to comment. Just like d9ty7 and others said, you were rushing the story at first and left out important information-description, but I'm glad you're working on these flaws.
I observed something very important that you've left out. Suspence is an important ingredient in writing and your work lack it. Every reader want an update that will make them yarn for more, something to always wish you will update five times in a day. You need to build up suspense in your work for it is what makes readers ask for more.
Again, I observed that you use the flashback method in narating your story but you are over doing it. Why not take your time, organize your plot and narrate it in sequencial order instead of rushing it through flashback?
Furthermore, I might have missed something but if not, what happened to Lizabeth's father. I can't remember you saying anything about him. Is he alive or dead?
I thought you wrote that Jenny is Ade's aunty's daughter? If that is the case, they are cousins. Is it possible that he dated his cousins? You pictured her as a girl who was sexually abused, what really happened or will you re-introduce her as the story unfold and tell us more about her character?
You really are doing great, just know that you've got a follower for I shall follow this story to the end. It's your first story and you are simply amazing.
Oh, and again, where does Ade mother work? Is she so wealthy as to give a seventeen year old five thousand naira to spend for a day?

Firstly, i'm glad you took your time to correct my errors and air your views. Sincerely, i'm glad you did.
Now to the questions:
1. Lizabeth's dad according to her mum eloped with his secretary shortlx after her birth.
2. Although Jenny and Ade were cousins, the relationship actually took place irrespective of their ties. We might blame it on their young age then.
Also,as regard jenny's re-surfacing, you'l just relax and watch.
3. Ade's mum is wealthy as we knw already but her work? That's one of the exciting suspense.
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. Now, i'l endeavour to introduce suspence,reduce the story's frequent flash-backs and plan the story sequentially.
.
. Once again, thankz sweetie!

thronekid:

Firstly, i'm glad you took your time to correct my errors and air your views. Sincerely, i'm glad you did.
Now to the questions:
1. Lizabeth's dad according to her mum eloped with his secretary shortlx after her birth.
2. Although Jenny and Ade were cousins, the relationship actually took place irrespective of their ties. We might blame it on their young age then.
Also,as regard jenny's re-surfacing, you'l just relax and watch.
3. Ade's mum is wealthy as we knw already but her work? That's one of the exciting suspense.
.
. Now, i'l endeavour to introduce suspence,reduce the story's frequent flash-backs and plan the story sequentially.
.
. Once again, thankz sweetie!

Goodmorning to you, thanks for taking your time to explain things for me. I now get it

TiffanyJ:

Goodmorning to you, thanks for taking your time to explain things for me. I now get it

Good morning sweetie, hawoz yr nite?

. Dedicated to tiffanyj,supermartin,tecno4life,gracile,jefferyjamez,sweetdreamer,fembleeze1,teebashy,gracile and harjibolar10.
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. ==EPISODE 18==
'
. "What?". Ade said.
. "Yeah Ade, i want us to cut it off, i've met the love of my life and besides i wont be coming back, so, let's just call it a quit" Lizabeth said.
'
. "what do you mean by that? Are you sure about that?". Ade asked in a fearful voice.
. "Fear fear boy, i was just kidding. So,how was your exams?"
. "Lizzy, jokes like this are way too expensive, you almost made me run haywire.".
. "Okay, i'm sorry for that. Am i forgiven by my lord?".
. "I wasn't annoyed dearie, just wanted to let you know. So, my exams were good, everything just went smooth, yours?
. "Mine was good too. Hopefully, our results shall depict our preparations.".
. "A big Amen to that. So, when are you coming? I've missed you a lot.".
. "Well, i miss you and can't wait to meet you too. Hopefully, if everything goes as planned, i'l be there by tommorow.".
. "Tommorow? Gosh, you want me to die of boredom, right?". He teased.
. "Never, even death herself dare not come near you muchmore boredom. Hum, I have to go. See you later. Love you!!". Lizabeth said and blew him a kiss via the phone.
. "Love you too, take care.". He replied and disconnected the call.
'
. " Whoosh, that girl is surely everyman's dream. I'l love her forever.". Ade said and smiled.
. There was always something about Lizabeth that He never seemed to understand, she was the only one whose mere voice was capable of sending his sorrows to exile.
'
. He drifted into wonderland and soon enough, his sub-conscious started pulling some stunts on him. He found himself in a garden of bliss. He saw his mum smiling excitedly, lizabeth's mum cheering him on, his best friend 'Ayo' dressed in a silky suit, some pretty girls all dressed in white gowns and a lot of well wishers all smiling and waving at him. His lips had pouted to smile back but stopped midway when he realised Lizabeth wasn't there with him. He looked around and saw her in her most glorious form, dressed in a sparkling white gown with a golden ring, she looked Angelic. He was about to kiss her when he heard some disturbing sounds coming from a particular corner. He looked around and proceeded to the corner.
'
. "What's this?" Ade found himself saying in reality and woke up immediately.
'
. "Oh shit, who can that be? Why couldn't the person just wait till i share a kiss with Lizzy? Damn.". He lamented when he heard sounds from the living room.
'
. "Oh boy". He grunted and proceeded to the living room.
. On getting to the living room, his mouth went agape and his face, whitish in suprise. The sight before him was one he had never imagined even in his weirdest fantasies.
.
. --To Be Continued--
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