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 Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 2:00pm On Jul 20, 2017 |
Timebombb:Mother of God! You really can't tell the difference between someone who actually knows the language and a rip-off? 1 Like
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| Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 1:52pm On Jul 20, 2017 |
Jaqenhghar:sai an grooming na ta tukuna kafun a fara wancan Bayanin. Affirmative. got a couple of months to feel the cold before normal duty resumes. |
| Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 1:47pm On Jul 20, 2017 |
Timebombb:I had no idea Muvvva could communicate in hausa this fluently. Your logic is flawless. |
| Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 1:43pm On Jul 20, 2017 |
Jaqenhghar:Ina da shi a email na..... Maybe weekend in nan zan gwada Kiran ta.... |
| Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 1:34pm On Jul 20, 2017 |
JJCYJ:First things first.... What the_fuck is going on here? |
| Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 1:28pm On Jul 20, 2017 |
Jaqenhghar:makaranta babu dadi ko Kadan. Muna hutu yanzu ai...... Wa zai zauna a wancan Garin ya mutu. Mata ta Kuma ta bace mun ban San inda take ba, gaskiya. |
| Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 1:00pm On Jul 20, 2017 |
Jaqenhghar:I'm going into exile.my cover has been blown. |
| Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 12:23pm On Jul 20, 2017 |
Jaqenhghar: Guy.......  Yarn me your main make i understand wetin dey happen coz I don start to dey fear....... |
| Romance › Re: I Will Be Giving Out 50k Worth Of Airtime On My Birthday Here, Watchout!! by IamLEGEND1: 12:19pm On Jul 20, 2017 |
Bro,no take us do this kyn play, biko. Some of us had heart surgery when we were kids, our hearts can't take the stress Coz fitness doctor been give me minor heart attack. We go dey wait for on the DL |
| Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 12:09pm On Jul 20, 2017 |
Jaqenhghar:I've been around for a while now and I know a bully when I see one...... Which vizkiz_definitely isn't. I have no problem with whatever it is she's tryin'a say, or more accurately- I don't care, but going as far as mentioning names made it obvious she has a thing against him which is what I was trying to point out. 6 Likes 1 Share |
| Romance › Re: Did This Bride Throw Shade At Her Friends? by IamLEGEND1: 10:46am On Jul 20, 2017 |
na just the usual roasting/yabbing between friends.
Nothing to see here. |
| Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 10:37am On Jul 20, 2017 |
Blackhawk03: 1 Like 1 Share
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| TV/Movies › Re: What Series Are You Watching Now? Part 2 by IamLEGEND1: 10:27am On Jul 20, 2017 |
Rapahel1116: 1 Like
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| Romance › Re: The Dangers of bullying people online. by IamLEGEND1: 10:10am On Jul 20, 2017*. Modified: 10:29am On Jul 20, 2017 |
This thread reeks of hypocrisy. Painting a prejudiced picture of vizkiz because you think you're better than him. You have at one point said some offensive shit_to someone here too, intentionally or otherwise. So, No one gets to claim the moral high ground because every single one of us has his preferred way of doing/saying things. Just because you don't agree with it doesn't make it wrong. I prefer to say things as I see them and so do a lot of people .... Call me a bully, I don't give a_fuck. Not my problem you're too fragile to handle the truth. People like you with a holier-than-thou attitude are always the worst of the bunch. 11 Likes 1 Share |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 8:56am On Jul 20, 2017 |
kinwayne Lleigh...... You guys are amazing. Thank you for putting together this competition and out of your generous hearts reached & gave out tokens to the judges and myself. Gestures like these warm the heart more than you can imagine. Thank you. |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 8:30am On Jul 20, 2017 |
NaijaChild:Really? |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 8:30am On Jul 20, 2017 |
NaijaChild:Really? |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 8:23am On Jul 20, 2017 |
laurelyn:honestly, it's been a pleasure reading your stories. Take it from a guy who has never written a single line of a story,you guys were amazing. |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 8:17am On Jul 20, 2017 |
kinwayne:did not see this coming. That is very kind of you, good sir. Will send the details over. |
| Romance › Re: Ladies, Would You Rock This Crazy One Piece Jumpsuit To A Party (photo)? by IamLEGEND1: 10:51pm On Jul 19, 2017 |
HannahHitler:Don't forget to dump your phones and laptops in the nearest river and go carve spears from rocks. 4 Likes |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 10:18pm On Jul 19, 2017 |
Looks like I'm late to the party. Congratulations to all the contestants.... I had a blast reading all dem stories. Until next time. |
| Romance › Re: Caught My Younger Brother And Sister Having sex,what Should I Do? by IamLEGEND1: 6:18pm On Jul 19, 2017 |
Jamie & Cercei Lannister in the flesh.
I need to see those niggahz. |
| Romance › Re: The¤Song¤Game by IamLEGEND1: 5:04pm On Jul 19, 2017 |
Magnoliaa:aa'ah..... Then you pipu should comment with the song title at the end na. Mode9- Lagos state of mind |
| Romance › Re: The¤Song¤Game by IamLEGEND1: 4:41pm On Jul 19, 2017 |
E e soro - Dagrin |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 7:23pm On Jul 18, 2017 |
Bull's eye by Talius CON- a good amount of backstory is good. And i've certainly talked about a few stories here that had too little of it. Your story went in the opposite direction and had too much backstory to the detriment of your work. So much words were used up building the character's history that the events in the present basically became an afterthought. And somehow the protagonist still remained nameless in spite of all that exposition. The four lines of dialog you put in your story were a little on the nose as well because I find it hard to believe that seasoned professionals like your character and the hitman would actually say those things. PRO- The story moved fast enough, even if most of the time was spent learning about a character with no name. I loved that you managed to avoid the common mistake of ending your story with the protagonist vowing to hunt for those who did him wrong. Full marks for that. Movie most similar to- Bourne identity (with no amnesia). |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 11:20am On Jul 18, 2017 |
Sabotage by firstgentleman1 CON- The ending was a disappointment. That is only due to the way the story was setup which made me hope for a twist which never came. Like I've said in the review of another story, the fate of the loved one in peril had been spoiled by the organisers so the shock value there is nonexistent. Writers should have avoided the temptation to go the obvious route of revenge-seeking agent who was double-crossed. This has led to a lot of stories having a near verbatim ending. PRO- The way you cut between the events leading up to the present and events after that was beautiful. There was no confusion as to what was happening and when it was happening. A very common pitfall of stories containing flashback scenes. No action but the drama and snappy dialog kinda made up for that. Movie most similar to- American hustle. |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 10:50am On Jul 18, 2017 |
A story by Prahcetomi CON- A dearth of details. The only location mentioned was Ibiza, and nothing else. Then the liberal use of phrases like "secret mission clothes", "secret spy mission", "secret name" and explaining what a dagger shoe does. Sounded like you were writing the story for a bunch of 12yr olds. Then a minor case of broken logic- how deadshot went from the top of a high rise building to changing into a suit and checking himself out in a mirror is beyond me. If he knew the only way in was to disguise himself then why swing onto the top of the building in the first place? Typos and a number of wrong punctuations. PROS- I liked the memoir style of the story. A fresh take on an already established premise is always welcome. The all round structure of it was good, Kept the story from being boring. Excellent way to foreshadow deadshot's future with the last few lines. Movie most similar to - the saint |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 9:50am On Jul 18, 2017 |
Coup d'etat by Drlaykay CON- Inconsistency in your choice of storytelling perspective. You started your story in the the third person then suddenly switched to the first person. And you don't have to always hold the readers' hands, you need to give readers a little puzzle to decipher on their own: "Covert means secret, 24470 represents highly important assignment, gency culled from emergency and 001 refers to the number one boss." you need to trust that the reader can figure some things out without you spelling it out for him/her. This only led to a bloating of your story: 125 words extra. Generic ending. A number of typos. PRO- I loved the overarching plot lines all building up to the the same end game. too many moving parts for a story this short but you made it work even if your words went above count. I have no idea if it was meant to be comedic or sad but the protagonist having no testicles made me laugh. Movie most similar to- White house down (with more diabolical goons). |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 9:21am On Jul 18, 2017 |
A story by Laurelyn CON- The devil is in the details. A thousand word story only has so much room for exposition. Which brings me to my next point- your dialog. You could've used the dialog to drop important pieces of information like who Keith worked for and where they were based, his nationality, where widow's castle was located. Etc. Helps elevate the reader's chrono-spatial awareness Which leads to a more immersive experience. You leaned a bit too much into character caricatures.....evil boss, shady shadow organisation et al. Could've used more drama and tension. PRO- Your structuring was excellent. I didn't have to try to remember something I may have missed which made the story flow quite well. While The heist nature of the story may not be the most original premise out there, it was interesting to read. Movie most similar to- Anything for her. |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 8:44am On Jul 18, 2017 |
A bullet in wine by Jetjacky CON- Save for some typos and the ending (the reason which you should know by now) , the main problem was: Confusion. We left Agent Smith beating the life out of you in a restroom and preparing to blow your brains out and the next scene has you handing the flash drive over to your boss. I began to wonder if the line "... Agent Smith gave after our romance in the snake cave." was meant to be taken literally or as a metaphor. Then your setting shifted suddenly from Birmingham to Lagos for no reason i considered the possibility of Agent Max hallucinating due to the concussion. The story just kept pulling me all over the place I didn't know which way to go. PRO- The catch me if you can premise was fresh and a welcome change of pace. Gives the competition variety. I loved the choice of descriptive words as well, they gave a vivid image, which is essential when are required to write a story of a 1000 words. Movie most similar to- Mr & Mrs Smith. Just a lot more confusing. |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 7:53am On Jul 18, 2017 |
A story by Chipappii CON- I know this is a spy story but there were too many moments that required a total suspension of disbelief. Prison guards strip you down to your balls and provide you with prison approved clothing and footwear, how John Doe got in with his CIA shoes remains a mystery. Then he went from taking cover to suddenly exchanging gunfire with guards using a gun he took from a guard he shot with a gun no one knows how he got. And then your ending: again, i could see that from a mile away. You have to understand that the audience knows that your lover gets killed either way so you have to shock us in other ways as that particular plot line carries no tension whatsoever. PRO- the structure of your story and how much time you spent constructing the environment your character found himself in. I loved that_shit. And then your action sequences and getaway,it was short but fun & exciting. Movie most similar to- Escape plan. |
| Literature › Re: Stars 2017 Writing Competition Updates & Story Thread by IamLEGEND1: 12:27pm On Jul 17, 2017 |
will be back for more later.
Man gatz chop. |
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