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[color=olive]It's Nairaland, y'all . .[/color]

[quote="I-Shine"]The next generation of hip hop, they call us the x-generation/
We bringing creativity into the scene, 21th century invention/[/quote][quote="OldSync"]Old-age counts, SYNC at once did what you do twice/
Better than what the judges minds read, use your church minds/[/quote][quote="Chiogo"]Like Jay-z, 'no matter how u slice it, am your muthafuckin' boy' girl
Roll u up like u was my hair and i was makin' curls[/quote][quote="Sharn06"]Ouch!! Pin that pricked the prickled hit the shingles
I hit more lyrical chords than your favorite jingles//[/quote][quote="Tianshie"]it's Tianshie yeah right who's diggin my position?
now get buried in my flow when I'm spittin tha potion[/quote][quote="Ibkaye"]B*tches be jealous, because this chik's been sick since forever
Touch this, u'll get burnt, ma rhyme's Hot like the African weather[/quote][quote="Sharn06"]It's like ei' time I open my mouth, I just gast close it
The wordz so flaming hot, so I'd compress em vomit[/quote][quote="I-Shine"]I’m here now so you can knock your head against the wall/
Ignoramus hate ‘because what I say is conscious but I refuse to fall/[/quote][quote="Alexpissu"]lyrically i dissect your spine i use it to autograph your ass/
This line consumes your thoughts u not in my class[/quote][quote="Chiogo"]Momma once told me 'hang your bag where your hand cld reach'
It's your turn, am your instructor, my job's to teach[/quote][quote="Jessicalb"]Me?, I come with many surprises/
The day only ends after the sun rises/[/quote][quote="MailMalc"]the doughs keep comin
da flows from me - so stunning
astonishing - mind blowing
that kick balls off the thread .    .   .[/quote][quote="Po Deep"]Run scared of me man they call me The Dreadful/
because I'm worse than a viagra-addicted child molester on ten cans of Red Bull/[/quote][quote="Wordsmith"]even the Doc knows that pill prescribtion can never supercede that ill description/
a mean distinction when the 'smith drills inscriptions. . ./[/quote][quote="MailMalc"]when i'm ON i might want to burn these wanabees OFF/
i switch STYLES - i'm like the P in the price[/quote][quote="Chiogo"]I ain't lost the flow so i'd continue to spit
I'll deliver as soon as someone gives me a beat[/quote][quote="Rhapsody"]what up couzins/d Rap prophet is still buzzin/
thot they had me under radar/bt i wasnt![/quote][quote="GThingAuto"]Yeah, I rep ma stars, cause eternal scars, smoking like cuban cigars
Drop it as it blaze, trace the mazes, got slaves behind bars like wrongly strummed guitars[/quote][quote="ebakwest"]ebak d driller gets your skull slammed at d door
u c them flat on d ground because i take d roll of d mata~dor[/quote][quote="Sharn06"]I'ma MOTOR-ROLL-YA***** like a stray kid sucking on SEMEN******
Learnt to swing, want to perch on my wings, I'm the only original like SEAMAN*******[/quote][quote="Alexpissu"]Brace yourself use your d*ck for the mic u just met your water loo
We throw u bananas cause u do what monkeys do[/quote][quote="Bolajibaok"]am a changed man now , its love i give now /so haters don't even persist
my bars keeps flowing/ u want to help me/nigga i don't need an NBA assist[/quote][quote="dblock"]drop this shit like I aint never left like your hemroid
do this shit every now and again spin like a movie house spin the celluloid[/quote][quote="Alexpissu"]We Restore Africa's Pride(RAP) by the sick metaphors and wordplay/
Pledge 2 the game after my tongue is bruised this pre-intimacy[/quote][quote="Sharn06"]No mercies, see. . I don't talk sippin drugs, I speak-a bustin yer trachea(a speaker, bustin a track here)
With punches, sims and malteserz (multis, ahh), i'ma complete the house by putting an arc here!(architect)[/quote]

[color=olive]Hybrid,

One question tho. . how can all bars in a verse rhyme and you regard it as a '4'?[/color]

chiogo:
Shout outs to Shaz, Cute-ass, Sexyabby, Islander, Naija_diva, Younghoodi, tRoOE, Lalaboi, Cashflowpc, Mailmalc, Menike, Sima, Scoon, Lysaa,

Wordsmith, Tianshie, Ibkaye, Thug life, Morenike09, Alexpissu, Po Deep, Ravenzord, includin' the retards on rap section and other sections of nairaland. And to the

poster, SeanT21.

[color=olive]Just seen this after how many years. .lol

Anyways, i'ma shout out back.  . Whatz guanin y'all. . Chiccy, KNiFe, Sly, Mailmalc, Alexpissu, Worldbest, Wordsmith, 'Brid, Ibkaye and her half-bruva Eldee, SauceKid, Kay_9, Ajadrage, Cadet and all the gbogbos of Nairaland. . you're the only reason I'm still on here, another reason to thank Seun for[/color]

[color=olive]
Don't try turning your lame posts at me, iite?? cuz

1. I said the 'Omode Meta' years, I din't say he sang it but I meant that his what his standard is

2. @the Unix guy, there is actually a rap forum on Nairaland, don't tell me you din't know that. . so I'd pretty much say Eldee is still on the right track

3. Back to the Abdu guy, it might surprise you to know that your 'KING' is not recognised outside the confinements of the 'Hiphop farm' Nigerians have created. . so try getting that straight into your wherever you think with[/color]

[color=olive] Lmao. . nice jokes, especially the custody one[/color]

[color=olive]true[/color]

[color=olive]That was so damn funny. . nice 1[/color]

[color=olive][list]
[li]Terry Da Rapman[/li]
[li]Mode 9[/li]
[li]Bouqui[/li]
[li]Over Dose[/li]
[li]Naeto C[/li]
[/list][/color]

[color=olive]Ice_Zik,

Come to think, a friend was tellin me the same thang yesterday, although not in the kinda of fashion you said it. Anyways, it's all good, tho I ain't like the song. It's good to incorporate nu' things to the rap game,innit?[/color]

[color=olive]@Eldee,
Nevermind, we that know the rudiments of the rap game understand what you are on about. . but this is a just a forum where bunch of ignorant people claim to know more than the learned. . it wouln't do you much good if you kept on posting here.

@poster,
Eedris is still living in 'Omode meta' years. . that song was nowhere near what I'll want to devote some 4MB of my i-pod to.[/color]

[quote="Malthuss"]@ 'Brid

sup nigga. . Malthuss feels like schoolin a female "clown"[/quote][color=olive]
I take that as a callout, dude. . We'll see how this ends

Humph!

iite! Did you just land from a circus?? (clown)
I'm uprooting this weed from ma yard like asparagus
You's a pussyhole, nigga. . that's the only time u make me feel lame
Your rap skills are 'mal'nourished, hence the thing in your name (Mal)
Did Flow get you shook? You're shivering to call me out (you had to ask Hybrid)
Need I drop you an intro - Ma punches leave u suffering comas in bouts
Bleep punches, multis, flow & mess the wordplay?
Bleep your horrible attempts at them, sucker YOU’RE so gay
Bleep you, your clique and ya bogus claims
Call me the Human Torch, look how I throw ya flames
You is like candy to a beast, son, just a crack of defeat
Pussy-ass nigga run mouth like vandalized oil pipes; they leak
I strike like 'Mal'aria, 'toss' you in the bin
That's what girl spit do to ya, it gets skin off your shin
You think battlin a girl's going to do much for your dented ego
Leaving this Boy2Men stan, wishing he's grown, he's returning his rented Love Machine
This dude is so rusty, niggas' got cobwebs between his balls, right in the middle
Have you realised that ya whole brain is a Skittle (that big --> 0)
This hoe complains because I got the dopest brain
Writin’ lyrics so heavy that’ll make ya choke n’ faint
I can’t believe this weak loser is vet
Talk of man’s game? You ain’t reach puberty yet (grow the Bleep up)
your a gay… no one minds what you is sayin’
I spit energy raps, u can call me Super Sayian
Drop verses quicker than ya humor raps get assembled
I’ll send this ugly Nigga back to his temple, i'm crushin his nipples
Ya dropped a ugly verse(looks like u) and expect me to love it; wussup??
Now u want to battle, u pissed because I laughed at ya stuff *[/color]

[quote="Malthuss"]only time i flow is when i'm blowin' nigga poles
Flowshow have you got a p*ssy?? Malthuss known for lickin' many hoes[/quote][color=olive]
your the geek that sits all day on Nairaland and gay porn
Dude is lost, you're a phony; Nairaland version of J-Kwon
Face your loss, bros, all these bitches know who the boss is
You as withered as leaves, hay-fevered wishes, you're busted, bastid
Or in your case, you just straight love men so much that you're down on them
So admit this shit to the audience, 'Mal[/b]Nutrition' [b]just got clowned again
Malthuss came to me with hopes & aims
To beat me in this battle but y'all seen how I left this joker slain


* - I laughed at his verse against flowshow

You got 24 hours to reply. . iite??And no flippin my verse[/color]

[color=olive]I'm sure this verse was on the Star Wars thread, I hope you're not asking me to counter Brid's Judgement here because the grading system depends on the judge's mind most times, and he's not a machine, you should expect flaws of some kind. Anyways, here goes. .[/color]

MALTHUSS' VERSE

Bitch da name is MALTHUSS better remember that
better yet forget that mess that u's a malfunction so r ma fix that
[color=olive]That was a very weak opener and the rhyme scheme was crap[/color]

i got that sic wit it flow u just a sick homo
flowshow should've done a no show 'cause am stealin this show leave him screaming oh no!
[color=olive]Just a filler. .  nothing to pen home about[/color]

only time u flow is when u blow nigga poles
Malthuss known for rippin many foes
[color=olive]If Mal thought this was a wordplay/punch bar, he must have been mistaken. . the line could have been worded better, e.g.

Only time u make flows is when u blow (nigga) poles
The addition of the 'make' added more sense and humour to it. . and basically, I wasn't feeling the next line, it's something a toddler could come up with[/color]

battling me is like tourists visiting ghettos, bitch that a no go
Bleep flowshow put ya in a 'ho'show got u fuckin for no dough
[color=olive]The simile was there, twas nice, a nice punch[/color]

leave you stranded like ticket touts 'cause am making this a free show
this nigga cumin at me with 'em fcukin trash lines
[color=olive]Now, how the hell does 'free show' and 'trash lines' rhyme?? Without rhymes, you are lost, although the first line had a clean punch in it[/color]

You need more than braces to straighthen up your wack rymes
stick to what u know best keep givin niggaz head shines
[color=olive]Two good punches but they are not properly worded[/color]

am gathering nairaland clouds to watch me reign on this fool
King Malthuss da mic checker u's a court jester only fit for ma footstool
[color=olive]In attempt to make a line, Mal just killed this bar. . i mean he ruined it[/color]

kick freestyle that'll cause heatwaves in radio stations
leave u several shades darker than slaves in plantations
[color=olive]Why you talking bout radio stations in a TEXT 'BATTLE' for?? The next line was great but I really wonder, could it be that ol' Malthuss has gone all rusty??[/color]

u want to battle Malthuss 'cause u think it brings u fame
u can bounce on trampolins and still fall short of ma game
[color=olive]'You can bounce' . . that should have been 'If you bounce'. . Anyways, it was a nice closer for me[/color]


FLOWSHOW's VERSE

flowshow be da master~ flows unbelievable~ drop more rhythms than id kabasa
this matth nigga raps like simba da lion king , animalistic momphassa
[color=olive]Dunno who 'id kabasa' is so that I can't judge properly, I'll just take it to say he deals with beats/rap or something with rhythm, and the 'flow was on show' but not used properly, you got your Lion King facts twisted[/color]

lyrical show caster~ flow makes mallthius motionless like an NTA newcaster
flowshow's heavyweighted ~malltius bars are bantam weighted~ a total disaster
[color=olive]How can you come to battle and can't spell you opponent's name right??
And nice comparison[/color]

mallthius be the hoodrat~ like hoodboi talking trash ~u shld get the skin rash
punk this rat~ make him fart~ like hummer exhausts puffin super mario kart
[color=olive]'getting a skin rash' for 'talking trash', understandable. . but the next line was just forced to make use of multis, well, that din't work for me[/color]

malltuis bars are like hybrid judgements delivered without analysis, simply lame!
flowshow da majesty~ matthius quacks like wack ducks~ what a shame
[color=olive]You dissed your judge, which is an unstated rule in battles, never, ever cross your judge[/color]

this fool is an irony like 2face preaching condoms ~what a felony
am diabolical like 9ice speaking vernacular~lyrical melody
[color=olive]Nice multis and similes, seems you're taking the Rap basics into consideration[/color]

like ruggedy baba ft eedris ~this nigga collabo infects others with lyrical wackness
matthius defeating flow is unheard of ~like noises made by deaf silence
[color=olive]great bar. . no more, no less[/color]

rhyme schemes intelligent~flowshow da word doctor like the general vent
like mallthius rod, his rhymes are similar to his manhood ~simply bent
[color=olive]You could have worded the first line better, e.g.
flowshow the word doctor, treat this stray dog (Mal) like the general VET [/color]

flowshows daisy~malthius bars lazy~ like morning fogs ~so hazy
like ''others people property'', ama run this nigga down like am ''crazy''**
[color=olive]'Flowshows daisy'?? I'm sooooooooooo not feeling this bar, ty[/color]

wordsplay iller than thuggacations pap~slay this dj like kay slay twice
ma flows comes first ~matth second~ama make this nigga come third like ""obie thrice"" (3times)
[color=olive]Could have been better, but i luvved the second line[/color]

lyrical sickness~none iller than flow~my shows postpone like soap opera intense
metaphorical giant ~i keep more nairas than hybrid's bank accounts in suspense
[color=olive]Dissing on your judge again! That is a no-go area . . apart from that, the bar itself din't really make sense[/color]

i spit ill~more retarded than bjbroke~my multis make u choke~like a nigga on coke
your punches vague~ so extinct like the girl group en-vogue ~flowshow multis are like spirits invoke!
[color=olive]I must say you really got the multis goin well[/color]

your punchlines are decayed~ like the nigerian society
mallthius is a bitch~ his pussi shaking ~like he got anxiety
[color=olive]You don't diss (disrespect) your country, bruv, that's another point to mark you down[/color]

my bars are processed`like pentiums in mode9 ~ bars deeper than six foot
add plus to my shit and get six foot + like am flowshow from da swat root**
[color=olive]didn[t get were that was heading to, sorry[/color]

big mouthed matthius is an easy nut to crack ~you is like julius agwu~simply a joke
old sch battle giant now a fcukin dwarfer~nigga is hard to break like an egg yoke !
[color=olive]'nigga is as hard to break as an egg yoke' . . i know that's where you were goin. . nice simile ther too, great bar. . prolly my feav. bar in this verse[/color]

my last bar leaves yall wondering~ is flowshow a fortune teller?
i play this nigga like my tarot cards~because with hyrid's extra 48hrs~ he still wouldn't reply
[color=olive]you spoilt your whole bleeping verse by not rhymin this last line. . the most important bits of a verse- opener and closer, then the middle piece is next. . anyways, I wasn't feeling this closer, it's not on the level of the bars above[/color]


STATISTICS

[color=olive]Punchlines - Flowshow

Personals - Both

Flow - Flowshow

Metaphors - Malthuss

Similes - Flowshow

Opener - Flowshow

Multis - Flowshow

Closer - Malthuss[/color]

VERDICT

[color=olive]This might be due to the fact that Flowshow had a lenghtier verse but I think Malthuss din't put no effort in this and that's why it ain't really to brag bout schooling people and all that shit. . Brid might have graded you on his mood/perspective and you won but evreyone else knows who held this for real, innit?

Case Closed. _lol[/color]

[color=olive]
Toni Braxton - Spanish Guitar (my lullaby, lol)

Usher - My Way

P Diddy & Mase - Mo' Money, Mo' problems

Toni Braxton - Unbreak Ma Heart

Diana Ross - Ain't No Mountain

Michael Jackson - Dirty Diana

Luther Vandross - Buy Me a Rose

Mariah Carey - I Give My All

Mariah Carey - I Still Believe

Luther Vandross - Power of Love

Prince - Black Sweat

Gloria Gaynes - I Will Survive

Michael Bolton - Love With My Eyes Closed

Lionel - Hello

Michael Jackson - Blood on the Dance Fllor ( not sure of the year)

Celine Dion - All Coming Back To Me (not sure either)

JJ Fad - Supersonic

Michael Jackson - In The Closet

Will be back I remember sumn.

Oh, Michael Jackson - Wanna Be Starting Something, Thriller and the rest _{(dnt wanna sound like an MJ pikin, lol)}

@trooe,
You took ma song. . From this moment - Shania Twain[/color]

[color=olive]Why do people like wakin up the dead??[/color]

[color=olive]Sorry I kept long with the feedback, weekends are ma busiest hours. . anyways, here goes[/color]

when i logged into d forum it was murder he wrote/
n when u try to skeet on me/ there'll be blood on my coat/
[color=olive]Murder who wrote?? I'll try to take it as you were referring to Sauce. If that's the case, then, your second line was waaaaaaaaaaaaaaay off, could have been worded better, I mean the 'n when u try to skeet on me' part, you could put something else there.[/color]

not my blood, not her blood, but your blood on my coat
cuzz i don't see myself dissin a nigerian goat/
[color=olive]Nice lines but they would only pay in a face-to-face battle, cuz then you'll be able to say the 'not my blood, not her blood' bit, but the repetition in text makes it look a bit dry[/color]

u juss on pussy ass nigga wit the mind of a roach/
live your sorry life like u's a fairy tale toad/
[color=olive]FILLER LINE. . nothing much[/color]

i'll murk u like it was the hills have eyes 3/
take your soul to the devil like johnny blaze will/
[color=olive]same as above, it's no WoW line[/color]

your aftermath'll look like hurricane mitch/
your lifes a glitch filled wit stiches n shit/
[color=olive]One advice: Fillers are good only when you're rappin normally or freestyling on your own, but when you're in a battle, you fight like the other person(the soldier) is aiming slugs to your chest, you do as much as possible to 'punch' him down[/color]

hey sauce, what do u think o u ending as my dinner?/
u haven't got a choice,sauce, u prolly in my burger/
[color=olive]It was OK[/color]

shred u wit a sickle like i was d grim reaper/
spray em slugs n scatter u like arnorld shwarzenegger/
[color=olive}COming to Rap Grammar, if you wanna make citations, be sure to get the names right. .do some justice to people's nomenclature. . and btw, this is a nice line but it is very unreal and untrue. .if you need me to explain that, lemme know [/color]

sauce? i never knew sauces rap n speak english/
u should be on my grain/ or gone wit pepperoni/
[color=olive]I'm just not feelin that, 'English' & 'Pepperoni'??[/color]

your punches are so lame u like d pigs in kalahari/
i'll end your dirty life slit ya throat with blade n tight ish
[color=olive]Is it the harsh summer or I'm just in a harsh mode now?? Whicheverways, if you don't rhyme, forget the whole bar. . I've a battle just due to the fact that I dint rhyme ma bars. . if u need to see, i'll post a link. .pls & pls, this line was just a filler again, what's wrong with you? You're meant to be fighting not making comparisons alone[/color]

i'll be your worse nightmare cuzz u walked into my kill web/
a broke butt nigga smell like u sellin poo ware/
[color=olive]No rhymes again. And what the eff is poo ware?? If I was to rate this verse, I'll say it's the worst you've dropped so far. . 1.5/10[/color]

[color=olive]@Brid,
That's cool. . I'm thinkin of venturin into producing in the long run, workin on it now

@Nextbeatz,
Yeah, it's Sharn06. . and don't start playin no games like b4

@eldee
Tx for the mention

@All,
Keep it coming . . we all got somn to learn[/color]

[color=olive]Lmao. . Nairaland and its many, many type-up comedians[/color]

[color=olive]How come people no dey get sense of humour??

@poster, nice joke there, jare[/color]

[color=olive]I would have come on earlier but I've been busy since morning. . and it's iite, I can deal with the verses however they come, it's what some have done to make me better[/color]

it's a battle o wits maine i ain't gonn loose out
i got flossin in ma bloodstream let it flow like i did south
[color=olive]There's one thing about Rap, you have tomake sure you say the truth and not make up fictional tales, like having 9"s when u don't, or flipping shows when you don't, d'you get me?

Apart from that, the flow was great[/color]

cold metal on your temple blow your skull into tit bits
take life out of em bitches flush your soul like shaukhan will
[color=olive]The first line was great. . but no, the second line was not on the level. . Let me point something out

cold metal on your temple blow your skull into tit bits

Now watch the emphasis on the rhymes below

cold metal on your temle blow your skull into tit bits

These are the keywords you should consider if you really want to rhyme, if you just want to focus on the end part 'tit bits', you should have tried rhyming it with 'nitwit' or 'biscuit' or something that flows with that. . if you wanna focus on the other words, then, that would have to be for internal rhyming. . For more information, check my article - Multi Rhymes To Improve Your Raps http://sharn06.forumsland.com/sharn06-about284.html[/color]

i hit u wit ma punches n make a river of crimson
i'll let it flow to d niger wipe your name outtta history
[color=olive]Rhyme and pattern, bruv, I don't see this, although you've good lines when put on their own[/color]

from d heart beat of the nation i was born to be raw
i be blastin through time wit em bitches life in ma claws
[color=olive]Just a filler line, cool with me[/color]

u fukc wit me ama light your head up like light poles
send u to d D(devil) tell him u bleeped wit d wrong soul
[color=olive]The repetition of 'light' in the first line made it kind of weak. . and the next one could have been worded better, good bar tho[/color]

it's obvious when i spit my ish it sets u ablaze
u'll burn like a rabid rabbit wrapped in d raze
[color=olive]the second line was 'forced', seemed you just wanted to rhyme at all cost. . and please, don't go to battle with these lines, they don't hold no water[/color]

soaky soaky my dickk juss left a hole in your moll
ill be back muthafucka 2 come claim your soul
[color=olive]You've used th word 'soul' to end one of your bars in this same verse, it's unethical. . and the 'soaky, soaky' bit was not needed, and how can you leave a hole in the moll?[/color]

fukc that shit when y'all say hiphop dead
bitches squeezed d fukcin life outtta it more on this thread
[color=olive]Good closer. . and true too, this is ma fav. bar


Hope I did u justice now, lol[/color]

[color=olive]So you mean 17 year olds are juss dumb? I'm just 17[/color]

[color=olive]Tx for the priviledge of feedin this, lol. I'll try make it as snappy as can be[/color]

Salute your boy brid /netcees b at eaze,/
My ryhmes sting like killer bees/crush this little’ wannabe mi’s/
[color=olive]Cracking opener. . the flow was there but the multi at the end of the second line seemed forced. . cld have been better if you said 'me-wannabes' or somn[/color]

Hy(high) leave ‘em careers shorter than mini-mi’s/
I am legend/prepare your WILL before u battle me
[color]Relative simile. . Will Smith in I AM LEGEND. . it worked, and nice rhyme[/color]

Recycle netcees/me . . I be that cat that make u bleed/
Burn netcess like cd’s /squeez em like can drinks/
[color=olive]The 'netcees' repetition was killing this piece and the similes din't clique much. . just a normal filler bar[/color]

never play fair/Bitch u like kennis did tu-face for p-square/
My words are hard-ware/hell yeah/
[color=olive]So Kennis runs P-square? Didn't know. . lol, that's outside the question, tho. . the first line was cool. . but the next was just empty. . like 'hardware'? how relevant was that to the bar? and the 'hell yeah' bit made the line just too short . . maybe you could have added something like FIFA when it comes down to 'fair play', something to do with soccer, d'you get me?[/color]

Will be one year sinced u passed on next year/
brids still hurr son/I aint going no where/
[color=olive]The first line, I had to take a double-think about that, good wordplay - senseplay, more like, lol. . the next was just explaining the first so that just made the bar perfect[/color]

Am so hot men/smoke detectors go-off when I grab the pen/
Smoked boys to men/brid flipped from superman to supermen/
[color=olive] The first line was nice. . I just din't get what the 'superman to supermen' bit was about in the second line[/color]

Ten out’a ten I hit the city like food scarcity/
Knock u out with the mic stuck in your chest cavity/
[color=olive]There's no such thing as chest cavity, you could use cardiac cavity or something to do with the heart, in case of next time. . but I think this is ma fav. bar so far[/color]

Hybrid felony / murder your whole bleeping Calvary/
fear factor when u watch what my mic do/
Star warz mine boy I got the C of O and the title/
[color=olive]Is it just me or most Nairaland rappers forget to end their bars properly?? One line is not a bar and cannot serve as a closer . . And what does 'murder your whole bleeping Calvary mean'?? But never the less, your lines were nicely-worded, much props[/color]

[color=olive] Tianshie, here goes. .

[b]Yeah, yeah, I know, you know that we all know the lines you're bringing in
"She's a bitch, RoosterDrinker, homo", and all the other things your mama's been, bitch
I'm crushin ya tactics, I'm a lyrical beast, while no one thinks this gays-sick, he's a fagstick
The fact that you've been so long in the game ain't nada, 'this old man' is gettin his ass whipped!
Ya not a threat to me, u've been here a whole lifetime and u still suck, I'll never give this queer kudos
You a wannabe gangsta, how hard can 'Tee' be? Ma bars keep you captive and kill you like they did Benazire Bhutto
You are old and rusty in this thing, ya grip on reality is looser than your grandma's vagina
at least u aint lie, at least u got principles, but like magic, ima put u to sleep im like the Sandmans behind ya
You turned pussy @ the sight of ma winning streak, you wish I had a d*ck you could suck, dude??
I caught your half-baked trick, you want to flow next because i'ma def. break your neck, don't try being rude
I really don't know why you think you do wordplay. . no one understands you
You got busted and got ran off this site. . then came back like you were brand new
Dawg, I don't know why you keep up with the rap. . because you're a waste to the world
See what happens everytime I blast??I leave you with more black spots than there is on the face of your girl
Don't bother wasting time posting nothing, because I read all your lynes yawning, 'shit!'
Tianshie's so desperate, at the mo', he's buying lines from his uncles' kids
You're a pussyhole, I dint need to battle you, you're as heavy as a tissue roll
Roll the drums, 'Tee' is dead, from giving heads, he was scared to go first, now i left him cold[/b]


Gd luck, Tianshie. . I gave you a 24-hour deadline but you exceeded it. . so you've got another 24hours, hope that would do[/color]

[color=olive]I really got go bed now but I'll do this first[/color]

am markolini/n am gonn slash u like samourai X/
i walk/ wit d magnitude of a tyranosaurus rex/
[color=olive]the slashes in between your lines could stay out. . there was no need for i walk / wit d magnitude . .
other than that, it was a good opener[/color]

like magnito/ am gonn smash to point of extincto
am gonn beat u till u become granulated sucreno/
[color=olive] In the cause of rhyming, try being accurate. If memory serves me well, Magnito dealt with iron bodies because he had the electromagnetic field around him. . had it been that u added somehting to deal with iron and magnet, t'would have been very cool. . and you're rapping in English, not Latin, there's no such word as 'extincto', so you might as well put it in inverted commas for next time[/color]

by GOD u'll be sorry u paired wit one as ill as me/
i'll cut u bits n pieces barbecue n feed to pigs/
[color=olive]nice bar, no more[/color]

my ish'll cut so deep in u your wounds'll never heal
u'll be weepin on your knees beggin GOD to help u please/
[color=olive]Educate me, how does 'heal' and 'please' rhyme??
And if that you think that was a punchline, let me tell u, it din't even reach the radar[/color]

when u spit u make a drizzle/when i spit i cause a storm/
i bring hurricanes and cylones down to flowshow's doors/
[color=olive]Good command of similes, nice punch but you went and killed it with rhyming 'storm' and 'doors' together[/color]

when u stand n battle me u'll need a life replacement/
cuzz when my punches hit u'll be buried in 13 caskets
[color=olive]Rhyme, bruva, rhyme. . and you're meant to be punchin him not sayin 'I'll punch' or 'When I punch'. . Imagine two boxers in a ring, one is throwing fists mercilessly at the other, the other one is in pain, but still shouting, 'i will punch you'. How does that sound?[/color]

am d real thing u juss a goddamn pawn on my chess board/
i dictate how u live and then squash u wit my skateboard/
[color=olive]The first line of this bar was great, but the next was not on the same level. . it was dry[/color]

send a slug up your spine, scatter u like versace/
i'll beat u home n away like d bluez beat farnabache/
[color=olive]Scatter u like Versace?? now, who u gon scatter someone like a clothing label?? You din't word that well, i suggest you re-arrange that line, then put a tab on your rhymes[/color]

i try to come clean when i drop my ish n punches/
u run your dirty mouth at me i'll light u up like torches/
[color=olive]Filler line. . nothing good about it, just a normal 'throw-in' line, no goals[/color]

no bitch can go free/ when u break into my solitude/
dayyum maine/u know i got problems wit ma attitude
[color=olive]Come to think of it, if this was a physical battle, that would have been a killer bar but it's text, so the gravity of that was not felt, good one tho[/color]

cuzz flow u so wack u had a Phd in wackitude
your show ain't flowin no more cuzz i blocked it wit my magnitude/
[color=olive]Using the word 'wackitude' which doesn't exist makes you look wack. . and wtf?? you used magnitude twice in the same verse. . you jsut dissed yourself

your show ain't flowin no more cuzz i blocked it with ma magnitude

That makes you sound like you are a fat, overweight person (think of the rest yourself)[/color]

now u learnt your lesson,nxt u hear my name scram/
[color=olive]No incomplete bars make a rapper worthwhile. .



Then The Next One. . I'll have to make it 4 lines each, because they are short[/color]

nairaland made a funeral/brid be d priest/
i be d killer/cuzz i sent u sixfeet/
there's a rain o punches u bathed in your blood/
slugs fly like sixteens some aimed fi your skull
[color=olive]slugs fly like 16s?? and no, that's no way to open a verse, reconsider[/color]

u is d game,i hunt d game, i tell u how it is made
blocked your vision flow/now u smell like rotten cake/
your life's all fukced/rotten as a can of dead fish/
u gonn need a coffin when i hit u wit ma punches/
[color=olive]I luvved the first two lines, the rhyme was there, it was a damn comical piece but the next was 'forced'[/color]

u so low/ popos got u beggin 4 their kokos/
poke n stoke your bloody soul, u blown up like my yoyo/
bitches want to act like cats u snitchin on da kingpin/
i'll order u be skewered n barbecued like u pig meat/
[color=olive] i don't get what 'yoyo' you're referring to, if its the normal one, they don't blow up, point of correction. . and why recycle the barbecue line? you used it in the first verse above . .
i'll cut u bits n pieces barbecue n feed to pigs/[/color]

am your god d one who states da way u lead your life/
i'll squeeze life out of u maine/ u gonn be still as ice/
been to hell n back like i was keanu reeves's constantine/
my ish'll give u scars like d edge of an open steel tin/
[color=olive]even the first line of this bars was used in your former verseand nothing spectacular in your verse[/color]

it's dumb o u flowbitch, fi you pick a beef wit me/
when am done shootin u/ your blood u going to skeet/
your life looks like d aftermath of september 11/
it's so bloody wasted u won't smell the gates of heaven/
[color=olive]You had a good concept with the third line but what followed it din't correlate, the rhyme was there tho[/color]

my mets'll flay like u had a bath in boiling water/
your show'll stop flowin cuzz u be crawlin in d gutter/
your life's a joke livin it like u carry a yoke/(OX)
am gonn help u snuff it out n squash it like a yoke/(EGG)
[color=olive]I think 'yoke' would be an 'hex' not 'ox' to make better punchlines and don't rhyme the same word. . makes your verse downgraded[/color]

u juss a clone the real u died a long time ago/
bitch buried in qiuck sand cuzz your sry ass stoned/
u know u can't throw punches/ like mohamet ali/
u juss one stupid fool/ like your local bash ali/
[color=olive]Don't even go there, this was wack , sorry to say and why is everyone like 'Mohd Ali this', 'Mohd Ali that' come up with new things and stop the recycling, thinking wouldn't deplete the ozone layer[/color]

there's nuffin in your block head than a cup of mamas pee/
miked with a little poo that came out from your pig/
u can't associate,your perfume made of skunk spray/
u brain is made up of nuffin/ but shit n dried hay/
[color=olive]Dissin people's mama's is all old story except you got a hard punchline to force into it. . plus your lines are no disses, they are like empty words[/color]

your mama knew u'd be like this she had your mouth bridled/
now it's runnin at d wrong dude i'll smash it like a timble/
it's odd when u live life like u spat 30 bars/
when u know your whole life u gonn live behind bars/
[color=olive]Thimbles ain't meant for smashing, they are meant to help with needles in tailoring, so that line din't go down well with me,

You know what, try rhyming better and relating recent incidents, and issues , even current affairs to make your punchlines, it's something I'm weak at but I think you can do it[/color]

[color=olive]I know, I'm still learning too[/color]

J-Unit, youz a motherfcuker with poor rhymes
its clear am the ruler, i drew this battleline
[color=olive]Nice line, tbh[/color]

aint got time for stories at bedtime
u're just a starved wack who comes beggin
[color=olive]This killed the effect of the opening bar, it was unnecessary[/color]

whenever its my mealtimes
i aint like God, but my lyrical power sublimes
[color=olive]Same case as the one above, it is not needed, although the rhyme is there this time[/color]

you look like an insane nigga we know by the name Tee-prime
go try doing something better , say, try mimes
[color=olive]Wasn't feeling the first line at all, there's no need to rhyme what doesn't correlate[/color]

before u get catabolized by my lyrical enzymes
i bleeped your momma. the cops know it aint a crime
[color=olive]before u get catabolized by my lyrical enzymes
That shit was dope. . keep it coming
Then next line was not that cool[/color]

so stop looking so grim, i believe my d**k was in its prime
opportunities come once in a life-time
go grab urs, because you aint got a dime
[color=olive] First of all, your verse is one line short, it's not a good thing for any rapper. . that's just like a clown forgetting his red-nose on the stage, d'you get me?
Next, you dissed yourself

I believe ma d**k was in its prime
This could be read to mean that the only time it ever worked was when fuckin a momma. . meaning you're (complete the sentence yourself)

Anyways, I think you got potentials, not that I'm in a position to judge tho[/color]

[color=olive]Flowshow, it won't cost me nada to murk you on your own shit, but I got a battle with Tianshie now, due within the next 16 hours, until then, I can't battle you.

I WILL battle you after Tianshie, so keep your pussy-lips shut[/color]

[color=olive]girlishfella@yahoo.com, whenever u're ready. . I'm out[/color]

[color=olive]Brid,

1. I still have a battle open with Tianshie, or can I have two battles open at the same time?

2. Plus, calculate this, I have battled 2 one-star generals, if i'm to continue with the winning streak, I must have battled at least 3 two-star generals. . if i battle Flowshow next, and i win, i might not be able to battle another 2-star general in the cause of this isht. . if at all i have to battle Flowshow, it would be after i have battled 3 two-star generals.

Try calculating this to understand what i mean. .

Anyways, i still can't battle Flowshow yet[/color]

[color=olive] Would have loved to battle you Flowshow but I got battle only two-star generals now, according to Hybrid's rule 8, since I already have 2 bars. .
plus, I've got a battle with Tianshie, why don't you just sit back and watch?[/color]