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Here we are....

I must commend your effort... no no...I mean your extraordinary effort in entertaining your audience. The accolades you are receiving orally so far is undoubtedly well deserved as you go from strength to strength in this short time in the literacy world.

As you continue yo reveal the unthinkable mystery throwing your audience off guards, it is important to point out some questionable aspect as the intrigue wore on...

1. Given the fact that Rex was with the key to the safe box... I find it highly absurd that the so called shadow would easily pick the lock and then have all the time in the world to write what I assume(until you reveal it) he wrote on the letter. Timing is of essence here...I dare you to say that the so called shadow poses some supernatural strengths..

2. .....and he performed some stunts deliberately mocking his rivals.
The number one Shadow is not that stupid,I picture him as one of the most trained,experienced and clever of the lot. How then can he be killed so easily?? Highly trained Soldiers/assassins with trained eyes instincts are mist time treated seriously and never taken for grants.

That awkward moment when he looked back and couldn't find his pursuer anywhere. We can't just assume that he, a highly trained assassin relaxed. No.....a highly trained killer alarm would set in at 100% if such happen and he would have thread immediately with caution and devise a way to respond to the unforseen contingency for every killers/soldiers,anticipation of death is the same as death itself if not worse. I have reason to ASSUME that he might as well swap bike with his back up plans for no one goes into the battle without a plan B.(what do I know?it is just an assumption anyway)

However,I have read and observe with great amusement in the past as the said souloho19 successful played the game of chess on the thinking capacity of his innocent audience who rarely got a grasp of where the journey leads to. hehehe....

I predict More twist....
More intrigue...
More revelation..

With souloho19 anything is possible.
Your standard has been intact so far.

Ride on!

He sigh....

I read down everything quietly until and understood that apart from trying to learn,this is also fun to you.

But...

You failed woefully in some regard.
You didn't carry out research on many of the insinuations you initiatl
Admittedly, no one has monopoly of every information concerning every sphere of life that is why research is compulsory especially when writing a story/book based on one imaginary vision.

Vision/imaginations MUST be altered unless you encountered a TRUE LIFE experience otherwise the audience well versed in a certain area you mentioned in your story would laugh in disbelief and not take you seriously.

A policeman ORDERING a soldier?? IMPOSSIBLE!!!! Even a so called inspector general of police is no match for a merely sergeant in the military nor can he issue order to the said sergeant.

So the so called frank ordering a military man is an insult to the military.

Mmm,a bloody civilian entering into a military interrogation room with such audacity is far from possible. it doesn't happen. Even the wife of a military group captain doesn't have the authority to issue orders at all,at all. Hehehe....I didn't take that seriously and only assuming you are having fun....learning the rope as amateur.

Some audience are just woe by the sex scenes while other by the pigin English. Every heard of the phrase "too much of everything is bad"??

I tell you this most solemnly,the ability to pull the crowd and leave them eagerly anticipating repeatedly depends on the make belief of your story... too much of the sex would bore them.


Be real
Be unpredictable
Be detail in your description,
Create a picture highly difficult to dispute in the mind of your audience and would get them scrambling to refresh this page..

You just took the first step to become a giant in the literacy world.

Best wishes!!!

queenbetsy:
Done!
Now I fully understand.

Rex... Always finding himself attached to "papers" one way or the other!!
Souloho, where's the Sunday special na??

The dude rarely disappoints. That special Sunday might comes mid night.
I have an objection on how the real shadow was killed.
But..
Let me celebrate Manchester united lost today against the so called minor.
Hehehehe...

This is beautiful,no doubt.

I acknowledged your creativity...and welcome you warmly into the literacy world with an applause for your effort

Was this rushed?
It surely sound like it was not...

But..

Descriptive....description.. in details...work on that please,you need to give your audience a clear picture of what the place look like,what the room looks like,what the face look like...You know,...give the place a look...don't just assume that the audience will know how such place looks like,for these audience are not in your head to have a much clearer picture.

He smiled...
.
You did a beautiful job indeed but I am still waiting for that intrigue sparkle...

Just a tiny line separate you and it.
Yes, you will get there soon enough.

Best wishes!

This is one hell of an update.
He still got it...
His aura with the key board is still very much felt by the audience.. and his high standard intact.

Well,even through I recognized your ability and talent, I am still not getting carried away yet in this story...Just know there is someone ready to kick your ass if you inasmuch as derail from the high standard you have set.

Maintain the momentum..
Yes,I am impressed.

Euphoria...
Ecstasy...

Even good guy do bad things.

I am with you as you lead us all into an exciting adventures.

Remain motivated more than ever.

Maintain the standard...
Keep the momentum.
Maintain the sparkle..

Work on your make belief aspects of this story...don't lower your standard.

If at any moment,you feel that you are losing interest,motivation or inspiration... take a break for a while. You must end this story the same way you begin it.

The devastated effect the audience felt at the beginning of this journey should not be tampered on.

Hey,don't give me that look.
Humiliate me hands down with something more natural ,more naturally and extraordinary.

Can you do that??
Yes,you can.

Best wishes!!!

....."the fish and water are best friend yet it is water that cook fish"

I have not been following keenly for a while now but here I am. I admit plainly that you have indeed step up your game.

Some came with a bang,continue with a bang and end with a bang....other came with a bang and fade woefully as time pass on making the audience extremely bored and lost interest completely..other came within what looks like this an uninteresting story but clicked into gear as time progress holding the audience to ransoms.

You belong to the third category!

Now this is what I am talking about...it was not rushed..it flows,it click,it is natural..
Should I say badohemmy has arrived?
Certain not...not yet.


But at the rate in which you improve geometrically, I can say in absolute certainty that it is just a matter of time probably in your next story before you become a recognized giant sought after by many. Only a lack of inspiration will stop you.

A certain Bibi294 capable of changing her facial look with make up took the same path way.

You have my undivided attention henceforth.
Remain motivated!!!!

queenitee:
What's up with the money we planned to contribute?

"We"??
Is there someone else collecting money on behalf of the writer?

I saw the writers account repeatedly along the thread which means whosoever want to contribute should drop it in his account even if it is a hundred naira(am I wrong or was it a fake account?).

I believe he will do the appreciation in his own time.

How is you..??,queenitee, souloho19, and the extraordinary ladies and gents here??
I am back.

You guys, take care!

Olam,come to daddy..

hehehehehehehe...as one who almost always laugh,most especially at exclamation,i could not help it but quote the above phrase.

I have to ask you even more solemnly,is this merely a make up story/imaginations from that head of yours or a true life narration with the necessary ingredient here and there to spice it up??

A true life event Then i am quiet impressed..

Merely imagination?? Then it is great.

The "make believe" aspect of this story is spot on...except perhaps where the said Olam left the village to the city with just 3000 on her with the goal of sleeping her way to the top (a virgin for that matter)...they rarely don't do that.
It is either they fled to their uncle/aunt house in search for green pasture or they goes to their friend house (who is a hustler)far way in the city or another state/country.

One out of a thousand times will you see another "like Abraham" that will leave his village with an idea of going to a city but with VERY little or no money in his or her pocket as quoted in the story---a virgin female for that matter...it doesn't usually happen like that for a woman anymore unless we are talking about a prostitute of which she the lady on the story was not.

One,two...and probably three,you will get it right...that aura,that crowd puller,that swags,that combination and the right use of word and the right time that will make your audience tremble and screaming for more.

Best wishes!!

...As beautiful as this story is,why do i have this feeling that something that would give this story an extraordinary sparkle is missing??

Are you rushing it?

I may make a critical review of this story when i am back healthy again.

Good job through..you can still do better.

Be motivated all the more!!!!

Down health wise but following quietly from a distance.
Good Job Souloho19.

Every episodes really did touch a nerve and provokes unexplained reaction depending on the individual.

You are doing a damn good job...
Ride on dude!

I read with great amusement from both sides of the issue...common sense should prevail here. I am not interested in the chat,i am more interested on what caused it.

Souloho19?? apart from reading his exceptional stories which were written for FREE on nairaland,i don't know him personally from adam and neither do i know who silverdam is nor have i read any story he wrote before...

But...

One thing is clear,if you must take any writer story or stories to you blog without FIRST speaking to the original owner due to one reason or the other that you cant reach him or her,you MUST ensure that you acknowledge the writer...IT IS A MUST otherwise it is a crime...Nigeria might not be focused on persecuting those who commit such offence now,but in developed nation the original writer can sue you and you will obviously be persecuted.

Silverdam,go back to your blog and acknowledge him that is if you have not done so,and then apologize sincerely to him,that is all...you wont die and it is the right thing to do.

Souloho19,things like this happen,you obviously cant control it...not in Nigeria.

Smh....

Inasmuch as they have been three exceptional and consistent writer i have stumble across so far this month, Souloho19 is the man!

....Instead of concentrating keenly on the amazing write up which undoubtedly is the right thing to do,i found myself concentrating keenly on the writer himself.
His God given ability to put two and more words together be it explosive action or drama is second to none.

I finished reading the last two episodes today that i am completely relaxed and free..i could not help but grin all through as he guild us into his world of imaginations.

A baby giant in the literacy world...that is what you are and ironically capable of giving the full matured giants a run for their money completely unaided.

I imagine what you would be able to come up with at full maturity....I see the audience trembling excitedly at the mention or entry of souloho19 while the most adamant critics run out of criticism and sat back with a smirk on their face enjoying the show.(hehehe)

Whosoever the Almighty has blessed with such extraordinary talent would do well to share the amazing work of God that the world may see more reasons to glorify Him everyday.

Every great things starts With a little beginning... may your inspiration and motivation to put in writing the amazing art God has bestowed on you never runs dry even as your glories becomes more pronounced by God.

Much Love...


***Meanwhile Happy sallah to our muslim brothers and sisters. May Allah continue to give you all greater reasons to glorify Him every day,Amin.

I am impressed.

happy belated birthday dude.. wishing you many more years ahead.

Centino:
Thought I sent you an email that time. Done so now

Didnt see any back then.
I will check for the new one you sent.

....The mention alert didnt give me any notifications. i had to stumble upon this myself.

Welcome back Souloho19.

Same way Rex have not eaten, so do i.
Let me gladly pass out too for a moment...

I will get back in fully flow when i recover.

I have almost practically run out of adjectives to describe your brilliance.

LITERATURE LOVERS ARE UNDOUBTEDLY PROUD OF YOU AND MAJORITY OF THEM DOESN'T HAVE THE REQUIRES EXPERTISE TO PUT IT DOWN IN WRITING.

Continue the good work!

I follow this extraordinary humorous story very carefully and critically but doesn't seem to have the required time to pen my observation and appreciate the writer amusing effort to entertain the audience and lecture majority who knows their onions indirectly.

I found myself laughing every now and then but has no way or chance to applauds the writer except today...

Centino Hehe...
I have asked myself multiple times.. "who is this centino This is the first story to his name so far and he more than deliver...Yes,he didnt disappoint. The last time i comment of this thread was when he updated something spectacular....I was inexplicably impressed that i demand immediately for his contact..unfortunately,the young man did not honour my request..(he laughs..)

However....

Instead of writing eulogies bases on accurate facts,i rather just say what might be on everyone lip...

YOUR LITERACY PROWESS IS NO LONGER QUESTIONABLE...YOU ARE NOT THERE YET,BUT WITH PERSISTENCE AND DETERMINATION,YOU WILL SURELY UNARGUABLY GET THERE.!

I have been mentioned many tines but didn't get the notification until i clicked on the notification bar last night. I never left nor ignore anyone permanently.

Ladies and gents...Have a great weekend!

07037163021 contact me on whatsapp only in respect to buying your books.
We should talk there.
Good Job so far.
Your talent has been pronounced... it is no longer questionable!

I am proud of you. Happy New month!

Angelsss:
It has been a long ride friends, get ready for the FINAL episode.

He sigh...
Unarguably the queen of short captivating stories here on Nairaland by a distance.
A proven writer to the core.
You sure know what you are doing!

Was I surprised??
I would have been if I have never read any of her stories before..

With great admiration,i read on..
Just four words escaped my mouth

I need your contact!

You have done well, no doubt.

...a true life story(yours or someone else) ??
I could have assume that this is a pure research but the input of "a true life story" as the beginning of the story changed my perception... I marvel at the audacity that I am tempted to wonder loud in the comfort of my bedroom...

"Once a girlfriend to a cultist or friend of a girlfriend to a cultist or sister of a girlfriend of a cultist or sister to cultist..or once a cultist herself.... the made up theory and assumption are endless.

All these theories and assumption could be WRONG.

BUT...i do know this...

If you desire to read a story not just any story but a highly captivating piece of art that involves cultism/herbalist related issue and a little bit of the supernatural, then Bibi294 is your girl.

Yes the very one who took us all for a ride with her "shadow of the green 1&2" Of course... I do remember it like it was yesterday..

She literally killed it there and I have absolutely no doubt that she will do so or even something better to this story.... it could be an upgrade.


However I have a few objection here so far...

A student... year one to be exact, no matter how beautiful, no matter how much popular she is or how much fame must have gotten to her,won't,i very much doubt will let herself to be bleep "publicly" in the full glare of some people.... it is practically impossible.
This is not a night club... this is not even at night, this was done in daylight...

So African ladies..a student Now allow themselves to be used publicly like that?? A beauty queen for that matter??

Some may argue that it happens or it could happen, but honestly I have never heard of seen things like that.

I am impressed.
Ride on!

Mizsylviah, are you alright?
I need your contact to check on you.
Stay fit.

souloho19:
My people, something happened yesterday im still very much in shock about. I enterwd the wrong vehicle on my way to see granma and i was robbed along the way. Everyne who heard the story keeps saying i should be thankful for my life and safety. What is my phone compared to my life? The hurtful thing is not my sim card, not even my contacts but the precious documents inxluding about two othee stories ive been writing at my pace and this same hole in the wall whixh is about three updates ahead...
So with a heavy heart i urge yall to unfollow this story as i dont evwn know when i can come online again...
One thing ia sure, only rapture can keep me frim completing a story i start but i dont know when as i am phoneless and inspirationless ryt now...
Thanks as always fam

Indeed thank God for your life.
it is unfortunate...
But.. be strong..
you will rise again!