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TiffanyJ:
There is nothing outrageous here. The fact that you can not abandon your kids does not mean another person can't. It happens and I've seen it with my two eyes

Really
Anyway carry on...
Busy these days!
Best wishes.

TiffanyJ:
Thank you sir, for taking your time to read this piece. I'm glad you love my story but back to Victoria, it isn't impossible to find kids like that in Nigeria. The girl watched her father went on his knee, begging her mother. She watched her mother sent him away and was forcefully seperated from him by her uncle. Not just anyman, not just any father, but she happened to bond with him more than even her mother. A child doesn't forget this kind of emotional pain. She had lived with that pain for two years without daring to voice it out. She had began stealing and misbehaving just to get her mother's attention. My dear, children of these days are smart. Listen to a four year old talk like an adult and you will know what I am talking about.
This isn't a new thing. Don't forget, Victoria isn't like other kids. Her life had been filled with lost, and emotional upheavals. First, her father's absence and then second, her brother's death. At four years of age, she couldn'tunderstand it, but at six, she understood that she had been deprived of a normal family and is hurt. Go close to eight years old and you will be shocked at what you will discover

I still find it.outrageous for a kid to do such thing no matter the emotional issue he or she is passing through... a Nigerian kid don't have such audacity but I could but wrong through having never experienced an extremely emotional kid.

Tell me this, how can a father who so much love his kids stay completely away from them because their mum threaten him

Either way,he would still find a way to see his kids privately without their mum's knowledge especially one who share a bond with him...that part that he stayed away for two to three years doesn't add up. it is remotely impossible unless the man is emotionally insane.

Smiles...
You deserve all the praises you are getting.
You are that good no doubt.
Best wishes!!!!

I read down this story again,again and again to the latest episode with smile on my face and great admiration for the writer...her exceptional use of English and her creative ability to put words together to create a mind blowing story that seem like reality, interesting..
captivating..
and strike the emotion of some readers..held me spell bound.

I read the last four episodes twice today and was forced to check on the lady whose brain could create this...I saw her and then went back to read the story again.

But,guess what??

I was looking for flaws,error...yes it is nothing personal but i was indeed looking for reasons to descend heavily on her with constructive criticism thereby putting her genetic gift of creativity to TEST... and witness first hand what that brain of her can do.

Obviously, I am not a man that criticised all those typographical errors...I was looking for something concrete that would strike an intellectual conversation with the writer and yea, i got what I was looking for. Even through the story is not a true life event,the fact that she already made it seem like a true life story means she should remain in that line instead of mixing it with unbelievable claims in the episode before the last two.

I find it outrageous in a country like Nigerian for a kid barely nine years of age no matter how highly intelligent he or she is and born to a Nigerian parents having the audacity to do what Victoria does.... nine point five out of ten times,it doesn't happen. Like having the audacity to talk back to her mum being so eager to get a stick to be uses in beating her.....only white kids would speak rudely to their parents in such manner and I am sure we are dealing with a Nigerian in this story...

Personally I couldn't help reading this story...it is interesting,simple and her choice of words is top notch..

So admirable...
interesting...
Inspiring...
Intriguing...
and Emotional...

All in one...
I can't help it but appreciate the writer..
May her inspiration never run dry..
Above all,may the Almighty continue to give you even more greater reasons to glorify him everyday.

I will ride with you till the end!!!

....And I login literature section today and discovered that two episodes has been dropped... admirably, one was dedicated to my humble self.

With great admiration,I sat down in the comfort of my home reading and taking details of every outrageous pieces of art the brain of the writer is creating as the story unfold...

Here I intend to inspire or motivate the writer either with..
Words of encouragement or
constructive criticism if the need rise.

This might be the first story he is writing...
He might not have capture the imagination of the audience as renowned writers do..

But I do know this...the raw talent/potential is there waiting to be tapped.

As long as he keep on writing,
As long as he doesn't get discouraged..
As long as he keep his focus..
As long as he learn from every constructive criticism..
He will get better!

Don't be discouraged...a journey start with a single step...

Inasmuch as I realized that this is purely a work of your own creative imagination, you still have to make it sound so REAL...that even the most intelligent reader,the most ardent critics would have no choice but remain glued to the story.

Now think about it for a moment...No matter how much a mum hate her daughter or son..No matter the level of wickedness a woman is,it is highly highly unlikely for her to send her own daughter away from her house when the said daughter has no job or any sources of income.

Nine out of ten times,I do not see this happening unless of course the daughter was not one she birthed.

Secondly ,it is clear that MIA is also educated as the story unfolds...inasmuch as she is desperate... inasmuch as she lack a mother's love,the tactics you portrayed her to be using to get what she want is amateurish!

How can she sit that close to where Dike is supposed to when all the wives as sited at a particular place? How come no security OE usher spot her sitting at that place which I am guessing is restricted when she is not even a wife, sister or close relation to Dike.

Is that even possible?

Basically your creative ability is spot on but just one hitch...

Make the story seem like something that happened in reality in the eyes of your readers/ audience that NO one would be close to ascertain If it is merely a fiction or a true life story...which in my opinion would make the story highly unpredictable making everyone eagerly anticipating to know what happened next.


There is no limit to possibility...
Best wishes!

pFolar:
woW sO sWeeT ... I feel lIKE starTING A sTORY MYself.

That would be great...
But...
Stories are not rushed...
Ensure you get an idea of what you want to write about...
And you have the time..
The patient to endure fierce criticism

Otherwise..

It would end up being an uncompleted blockbuster story or an abandoned one.

Stay focus and be objective.
Cheers!

Buttersss:
thanks a lot
yes
I am writing other stories. I also go by the name " Angelsss"
-love lies and divorce
-Dayo's angel
-house of secrets
follow them

You are saying that all these listed stories are finished work or is it still work in progress??

I will squeeze time to check them out anyway...

I am anticipating an even more interesting stories even before checking them out...

You are obviously that good taking this very story into consideration.

May God continue to motivate and inspire you and above all,may HE continue to give you greater reasons to Glorify HIM everyday.

Extra Grace!!!!!

I thought he is an aspiring comedian... a provocative one taking into consideration his comments I stumble upon in some stories out there. My perception of the young man capable of putting words together that could bring uncontrollable laughter.. has changed. Obviously there was more to it than what I saw back then.

The self acclaimed son of sango can write.
His ability with the key board is no longer in doubt.

Quiet captivating and intriguing...
It might as well be x-rated If it is shoot into a movies.

I will keep on observing from a distance and rate his ability to bring the story to an anticlimax.
Ride on dude!!!!

Buttersss:
Thanks guys for reading, now let's go to other stories.

Impressive... As short as it is,it is quiet interesting and captivating.


"Let's go to other stories"
Do this mean you are writing another story or there is another story or stories you wrote that I might have missed?

You are good,you know? Really good.
I will ride with you henceforth!!

nikz:
Really good!

Smiles,Happy you are seeing it too... Glad she is getting the recognition she deserve here. If she continue like this...she will go places!!!

Breathtaking and captivating..
The girl is good!!!

This sounds like a white movies.. captivating... Intriguing... Action packed.. Suspense... Unpredictable and Entertaining!
Is this truly your imagination?? Impressive!

From an amazing action writer called ironkurtain and Eze2000 to a certain one hell of a writer.., a pure suspense specialist called fiyah and Tiffany to a multitalented magician called Solomonbrown to a heavily pregnant Lady,the master of simple words outrageously talented in her own way called chumzypikny and now a certain buttersss I read her work and marvel at what her brain can do...I read on with great admiration and a smile on my face...

How I wish those who could click the right button to make these stories public...and the writers heavily compensated are reading
How.I wish I could say something to inspire them more..

Ladies and gents,It gives me unspeakable joy to relate with you guys...indeed i am proud of you all...
You guys are indeed a solution to your generation!
May God continue to inspire and bless the work of your hands.
Extra grace!!!!

I came across this story....and followed it silently.....

A story written by a heavily pregnant woman...
A story that sound like reality....
A story that could keep the readers glue to his or her phone for hours..
A story that could get someone emotional..
A story that teaches one various lessons..
I won't be surprised if this story or any of her work influence people with bad or evil behavior or intention to become a better person...

She may not be the very best but Who then won't acknowledged the writer creative ability?? Her ability to string words together to create something interesting bar errors here and there is quiet impressive!

Who say Nigerians don't have creative talent due to the recycled nollywoods movies?

such a talent...with a pen or keyboard on her hand,she is something else...am I merely exaggerating?? certain not!

Be motivated..
Be inspired...
Given the right environment, financial empowerment,I see you becoming renowned.

What more can I say?? you are on the verge of increasing our population... probably with another writer.

smiles...
wishing you safe delivery.

Johnsown1:
My guess is right na, so can i call u mid nights calls,since he will be sleeping and u will just pretends as If ur using the toilet.

Unbelievable!!!!!!! a pregnant married woman with THREE kids ?? yet you have the audacity to make such outrageous suggestion?? Even if you happen to be older than she is,what exactly is your motive for making such disgusting suggestion?

oheni:
nice one! welcome back

smiles...the story is interesting, right?

Have this interesting story be abandoned??
Smh.....it seem great and captivating so far

oyinella:
HBD my personal Bibi, luv u personally

Is today her birthday?? may she be celebrated.

harameede99:
no dear talking lyk dis isnt lyk d samy i knw i dnt want u to attract unnecessary pple to gain ya attention

You know him personally?

This Is one hell of a story...one hell of a dude!
Making the story so unpredictable thereby making the readers glue to the story..

Quiet admirable!!!

At this stage,i am forced to ask if this is merely the writer's imagination or he is relaying someone else story...

You killed it dude.
Anticipating the next episode...
I will ride with you!

Cough... Cough.. Cough...

I think I am not feeling fine... I will need Doc. Ogo to check me... I assume she is a doctor as her name implies...

Seriously, William should have told her everything immediately he saw that picture. Why hide it??
Why pretend??
Pretending is almost the same as lying.

You loved her?
She loves you?
You both know this..
Then what is the rationality for lying??

The secret of a long lasting relationship /marriage apart from LOVE... Is HONESTY.
Send the ball of truth to her court and let her decide what to do with it..

They might end up getting married as the story unfold but one thing is sure... Never lie as something sensitive.

HUMILIATION doesn't matter.. TRUST does!